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You are organising a trip to Tenby, United Kingdom, for a group of students from Brighton, United Kingdom. Write to the Tour Manager, Mr Abraham, of an organisation that organises trips to Tenby. v.2

You are organising a trip to Tenby, United Kingdom, for a group of students from Brighton, United Kingdom. Write to the Tour Manager, Mr Abraham, of an organisation that organises trips to Tenby. v. 2
Dear Mr Abraham, I am Henry Brown, a teacher from the Brighton Scholar's School, United Kingdom, and writing to inquire about the accommodation facilities you offer as we are planning a trip to Tenby soon. According to our previous email correspondence, I would like to inform you that we are a team of 18 members, including three teachers, and would be staying in Tenby between 12th and 18th June 2019. I would request you to inform me about the availability of your rooms and the type of service you offer. Those rooms should be on the same floor and with heating facilities. Our budget is moderate and would like to know the facilities you offer, like breakfast, tour guide and vehicles within the price. Since this is an educational expedition, we will mostly stay out and this is why the security of our belongings is a concern for us. I hope your lodge can ensure that. Please let me know about the reservation and payment process so that we can book our rooms ell in advance. Any other tips for us? Please feel free to mention. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you in advance for your cooperation. Sincerely yours, Henry Brown
Dear Mr Abraham,

I am Henry Brown, a teacher from the Brighton Scholar's School, United Kingdom, and writing to inquire about the accommodation facilities you offer as we are planning a trip to
Tenby
soon
.

According to our previous email correspondence, I would like to inform you that we are a team of 18 members, including three teachers, and would be staying in
Tenby
between 12th and 18th June 2019. I would request you to inform me about the availability of your rooms and the type of service you offer. Those rooms should be on the same floor and with heating facilities. Our budget is moderate and would like to know the facilities you offer, like breakfast, tour guide and vehicles within the price.

Since this is an educational expedition, we will
mostly
stay out and this is why the security of our belongings is a concern for us. I hope your lodge can ensure that.
Please
let
me know about the reservation and payment process
so
that we can book our rooms ell in advance. Any other tips for us?
Please
feel free to mention.

I look forward to hearing from you
soon
. Thank you in advance for your cooperation.

Sincerely
yours,

Henry Brown
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You are organising a trip to Tenby, United Kingdom, for a group of students from Brighton, United Kingdom. Write to the Tour Manager, Mr Abraham, of an organisation that organises trips to Tenby. v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
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