Dear Sir or Madam,
I have received your contact details from one of my friends who has recently availed your service. He was very positive regarding your hospitality and recommended your hostel situated in the Snowy Mountains for a study excursion we are planning to take at the beginning of the next month. I am hoping you would arrange suitable accommodation for the group and help us enjoy the tour.
I am arranging a four days trip to the Snowy Mountains for 14 students from Perth public school. We will arrive on 3rd April, in the morning; however, we would directly go to sightseeing. Thus, we would check-in into the hostel in the evening. A group of 15 students and I would require suitable accommodation for four days.
We would prefer four rooms and we do not mind sharing the rooms. As we are travelling from Perth, I am confident that the place might freeze us. We would appreciate if we can get extra blankets along with room heaters considering the extreme cold weather. My friend has mentioned that breakfast is included in the package. However, it would be nice if you could let me know the revised price including the dinner as well.
I expect room availability and price details to be shared via a mail soon.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Naaz Loan
Dear Sir or Madam,
I have received your contact
details
from one of my friends who
has
recently availed your service. He was
very
positive
regarding your hospitality and recommended your hostel situated in the Snowy Mountains for a study excursion we are planning to take at the beginning of the
next
month. I am hoping you would arrange suitable accommodation for the group and
help
us enjoy the tour.
I am arranging a four days trip to the Snowy Mountains for 14 students from Perth public school. We will arrive on 3rd April, in the morning;
however
, we would
directly
go to sightseeing.
Thus
, we would
check
-in into the hostel in the evening. A group of 15 students and I would require suitable accommodation for four days.
We would prefer four
rooms and
we do not mind sharing the
rooms
. As we are travelling from Perth, I am confident that the place might freeze us. We would appreciate if we can
get
extra blankets along with
room
heaters considering the extreme
cold
weather. My friend has mentioned that breakfast
is included
in the package.
However
, it would be nice if you could
let
me know the revised price including the dinner
as well
.
I
expect
room
availability and price
details
to
be shared
via a mail
soon
.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours
faithfully
,
Naaz
Loan
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