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You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. v.1

You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to get some information about the accommodation at your hostel during our visit to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales. I am in charge of the trip for a group of students and would appreciate your assistance regarding this. I am John Miller, a lecturer at the St Joseph’s College in Perth. We are planning to take a trip to Australia next month and would stay there from 2nd May to 7th May. We would like to visit the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales with our students as part of a study excursion. We have planned to stay at your Hostel during this trip for one week. We are a group of 20 students and 3 lecturers and we require accommodation of 5 double bedrooms and 2 large deluxe rooms. It would be great if we can get rooms with attached bathrooms and kitchens because some of our students prefer to cook for themselves. Please let us know the availability of accommodation in the mentioned period and booking details if they are available. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, John Miller
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to
get
some
information about the accommodation at your hostel during our visit to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales. I am in charge of the trip for a group of
students
and would appreciate your assistance regarding this.

I
am John Miller, a lecturer at the St Joseph’s College in Perth. We are planning to take a trip to Australia
next
month and would stay there from 2nd May to 7th May. We would like to visit the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales with our
students
as part of a study excursion.
We
have planned to stay at your Hostel during this trip for one week.

We
are a group of 20
students
and 3
lecturers and
we require accommodation of 5 double bedrooms and 2 large deluxe rooms. It would be great if we can
get
rooms with attached bathrooms and kitchens
because
some
of our
students
prefer to cook for themselves.

Please
let
us know the availability of accommodation in the mentioned period and booking
details
if they are available.

Thank you in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

John Miller
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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