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You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager: – What the problem is– How you feel about the problem– What steps you want the manager to take v.2

You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager: – What the problem is– How you feel about the problem– What steps you want the manager to take v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the facilities provided by your sports center located at the city center. It has been two years since I and my wife joined this center. We both attend the yoga classes in the morning and do swimming in the evening. I want to bring into your notice that the changing rooms in the pool section are not being maintained properly. Firstly, the towels are soiled and even damp sometimes. Secondly, there is a foul smell in the rooms most of the time. It seems as if the area is not cleaned thoroughly and no room freshener is used. We talked with the facilitator before writing to you but the issue was ignored rather than being resolved. Such a response has disappointed us as it is a basic hygiene issue which should have been taken care of immediately after the first complaint. I would like you to ensure that clean towels are supplied after every swimming session and rooms are cleaned regularly. If the problem of foul smell can also be tackled by installing ventilators, we would be grateful to you. I look forward to receiving a prompt response. Yours faithfully
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the facilities provided by your sports center located at the city center. It has been two years since I and my wife
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
this center. We both attend the yoga classes in the morning and
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go swimming".
do swimming
in the evening.

I want to bring into your notice that the changing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
in the pool section are not
being maintained
properly
.
Firstly
, the towels
are soiled
and even damp
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
.
Secondly
, there is a foul smell in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
most of the time. It seems as if the area is not cleaned
thoroughly
and no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
freshener is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
. We talked with the facilitator
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
writing to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the issue was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
rather
than
being resolved
. Such a response has disappointed us as it is a basic hygiene issue which should have
been taken
care of immediately after the
first
complaint.

I would like you to ensure that clean towels
are supplied
after every swimming session and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
are cleaned
regularly
. If the problem of foul smell can
also
be tackled
by installing ventilators, we would be grateful to you.

I look forward to receiving a prompt response.

Yours
faithfully
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager: – What the problem is– How you feel about the problem– What steps you want the manager to take v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
199 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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