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You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports centre that you visit. Write s letter to the sports centre manager. v.2

You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports centre that you visit. Write s letter to the sports centre manager. v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the condition of the changing room at a sports centre. I am giving yoga classes at this sports centre since one year. I want to bring your attention that the condition of the changing room is below level. Firstly, there is no proper drainage system for the water. Secondly, there is a horrible smell in the changing rooms most of the time. It seems that the rooms are not being cleaned properly by the cleaning staff. Moreover, some of the tiles on the floor are broken and paint has been removed from the walls. Last but not least, some of the doors are not looked accurately and sometimes it is creating obstacles for the girls and women. I would like you to ensure that rooms are cleaned on a regular basis and room freshener is also provided to the cleaning staff. Install ventilators in the rooms to prevent the foul smell and keep the environment of the sports centre healthy. I would like to receive a prompt response from your side. Yours faithfully, Ravi.
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the condition of the changing
room
at a sports
centre
. I am giving yoga classes at this sports
centre
since one year.

I
want to bring your attention that the condition of the changing
room
is below level.
Firstly
, there is no proper drainage system for the water.
Secondly
, there is a horrible smell in the changing
rooms
most of the time. It seems that the
rooms
are not
being cleaned
properly
by the cleaning staff.
Moreover
,
some of the
tiles on the floor
are broken
and paint has
been removed
from the walls. Last
but
not least,
some of the
doors are not looked
accurately
and
sometimes
it is creating obstacles for the girls and women.

I would like you to ensure that
rooms
are cleaned
on a regular basis and
room
freshener is
also
provided to the cleaning staff. Install ventilators in the
rooms
to
prevent
the foul smell and
keep
the environment of the sports
centre
healthy.

I would like to receive a prompt response from your side.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ravi.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports centre that you visit. Write s letter to the sports centre manager. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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