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8. You have had problems with a changing room in a sports center. You have made some complaints but nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the manager stating: – The issues with the changing rooms– What has been done about it– What you wan v.2

8. You have had problems with a changing room in a sports center. You have made some complaints but nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the manager stating: – The issues with the changing rooms– What has been done about it– What you wan v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to express dissatisfaction with the changing room in the sports center. Let me elaborate on the situation in more detail. I am an athlete by profession. I have a swimming competition coming in few days, For which I use to do practice in the sports center. but I am not comfortable with the changing room because whenever I went for changing the dree, something always got missed from the wallet. The condition become worsened, when one day I went to the changing room to change my swimsuit, as it was wet. I hanged up my regular dress on the hanger and went for hand wash. when I came back after washing hands my suit was missing. I had nothing to wear except that wet swimsuit. it was very cold outside, so I got sick. Since, Than, I have made so many complaints to the sports complex authority, but no one has taken this matter seriously. I would appreciate if you investigate this issue and take serious action. Also make strict policies regarding changing room. I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest. regards,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express dissatisfaction with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changing
room in the sports center.
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Let
me elaborate on the situation in more detail.

I am an athlete by profession. I have a swimming competition coming in few days, For which I
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
do practice in the sports center.
Use a comma before 'but' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
but
I am not comfortable with the
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changing
room
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because
whenever I went for
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changing
the
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dree
, something always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
missed from the wallet. The condition become worsened, when one day I went to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changing
room to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
my swimsuit, as it was wet. I hanged up my regular dress on the hanger and went for hand wash.
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when
I came back after washing hands my suit was missing. I had nothing to wear except that wet swimsuit.
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it
was
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very
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cold
outside,
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so
I
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got
sick.

Since,
Did you mean "then"?
Than
, I have made
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so
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many
complaints to the sports complex authority,
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but
no one has taken this matter
seriously
.

I would appreciate if you investigate this issue and take serious action.
Also
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make
strict policies regarding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changing
room.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
regards
,
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter 8. You have had problems with a changing room in a sports center. You have made some complaints but nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the manager stating: – The issues with the changing rooms– What has been done about it– What you wan v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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