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You are looking for summer job. Write a letter to an employer. -introduce yourself-explain what type of job you like-explain your previous experiences and related skillsYou should write at least 150 words. v.2

You are looking for summer job. Write a letter to an employer. -introduce yourself-explain what type of job you like-explain your previous experiences and related skills v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing you here to express my interest to join you company for summer openings. I am shahla, a senior year student from University of Oklahoma. Currently I am residing in the south side of the city. As I am studying in department of Mass communication, I would prefer to work in the communication department, if possible. Assisting communication officer, co-ordinating with press and updating social media contents are some of the tasks I enjoy. I am I may mention that I have worked as press and media co-ordinator at Toronto Internatioanal Film Festival for last two years. Not only in organizing press kit, but you can also relay on me to maintain the social media platforms. I am also comfortable using photo editing and video editing softwares like photoshop, final cut pro etc. Please keep be informed if any opportunity arises in your company. Yours faithfully, shahla
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing you here to express my interest to
join
you
company
for summer openings.

I am
shahla
, a senior year student from University of Oklahoma.
Currently
I am residing in the south side of the city.

As I am studying in department of Mass communication, I would prefer to work in the communication department, if possible. Assisting communication officer,
co-ordinating
with press and updating social media contents are
some of the
tasks I enjoy. I
am


I may mention that I have worked as press and media
co-ordinator
at Toronto
Internatioanal
Film Festival for last two years. Not
only
in organizing press kit,
but
you can
also
relay on me to maintain the social media platforms. I am
also
comfortable using photo editing and video editing
softwares
like photoshop, final
cut
pro etc.

Please
keep
be informed
if any opportunity arises in your
company
.

Yours
faithfully
,

shahla
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are looking for summer job. Write a letter to an employer. -introduce yourself-explain what type of job you like-explain your previous experiences and related skills v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
150 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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