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Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain what experience and special skills you have- tell him/her when you think you could startWrite at least 150 words. v.2

Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain what experience and special skills you have- tell him/her when you think you could start v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter in search of a part-time football coach at your well-known football club, -UMCA. I am a student. Currently, I am pursuing a Bachelor degree in sports management from LUMS school of sports. Besides, I am serving as a football team coach for a university sports association, where my responsibilities include, to train new players, to give them knowledge about fitness and health, to improve team efficiency, to enhance the reputation of the university club. Furthermore, I have served as a mentor at Jinnah stadium. Moreover, I have done training courses in team management, problem-solving, leadership skills. I believe my experience makes me a suitable candidate for a mentor. I can start, by the next week and I am available between the hours of 4 pm to 8 pm, as I have to attend classes in the morning. please, find my Cv attached for your perusal. If you have any further questions, please, do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to discussing this opportunity further at interview. Regards,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter in search of a part-time football coach at your well-known football club,
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-UMCA
.

I am a student.
Currently
, I am pursuing a Bachelor degree in sports management from
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LUMS
school of sports.
Besides
, I am serving as a football team coach for a university sports association, where my responsibilities include, to train new players, to give them knowledge about fitness and health, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
team efficiency, to enhance the reputation of the university club.
Furthermore
, I have served as a mentor at Jinnah stadium.
Moreover
, I have done training courses in team management, problem-solving, leadership
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

I believe my experience
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
me a suitable candidate for a mentor. I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
, by the
next
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
week and
I am available between the hours of 4 pm to 8 pm, as I
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have to
attend classes in the morning.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
please
, find my
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Cv
attached for your perusal. If you have any
further
questions,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
, do not hesitate to contact me.

I look forward to discussing this opportunity
further
at interview.

Regards,
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain what experience and special skills you have- tell him/her when you think you could start v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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