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Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain what experience and special skills you have- tell him/her when you think you could startWrite at least 150 words. v.2

Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain what experience and special skills you have- tell him/her when you think you could start v. 2

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter in search of a part-time football coach at your well-known football club, -UMCA. I am a student. Currently, I am pursuing a Bachelor degree in sports management from LUMS school of sports. Besides, I am serving as a football team coach for a university sports association, where my responsibilities include, to train new players, to give them knowledge about fitness and health, to improve team efficiency, to enhance the reputation of the university club. Furthermore, I have served as a mentor at Jinnah stadium. Moreover, I have done training courses in team management, problem-solving, leadership skills. I believe my experience makes me a suitable candidate for a mentor. I can start, by the next week and I am available between the hours of 4 pm to 8 pm, as I have to attend classes in the morning. please, find my Cv attached for your perusal. If you have any further questions, please, do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to discussing this opportunity further at interview. Regards,

Dear Sir/Madam,

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improve
 team efficiency, to enhance the reputation of the university club. Furthermore
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.

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makes
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start
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Cv
 attached for your perusal. If you have any further
 questions, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
, do not hesitate to contact me.

I look forward to discussing this opportunity further
 at interview.

Regards, 

7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain what experience and special skills you have- tell him/her when you think you could start v. 2

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

176 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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