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Freshwater has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respon v.5

Freshwater has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respon v. 5
Some countries face scarcity of water. But, this has become a worldwide problem due to water’s burgeoning demand. In this essay, I will illustrate the factors contributing to this trend and then elicit certain steps to control its demand. There are compelling reasons for rising applications of fresh water. The main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas. The global phenomenon of urbanization has compounded this demand for water. In addition, since the beginning of industrialization, water has been increasingly used for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipments and so on. Moreover, large amounts of water are being used for recreational purposes. For instance, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts use an avalanche of water. Therefore, water scarcity has risen and is now a global problem. However, certain steps can be taken by governments and individuals to stop the surge in water usage. Firstly, higher prices can be enacted for consuming large amounts of water. In addition, tax deductions may be applicable to those using less. Secondly, governments can invest in the infrastructure and water purification plants to serve the public and organizations. Finally, awareness campaigns can be organized to educate the general public to be stringent in water usage. Consequently, these policies will help in curbing the demand. In conclusion, the factors contributing to the burgeoning demand for water are due to population explosion in cities, industrial activities and recreational purposes. governments can enact higher prices and tax deductions depending on respective water usage. Also, they can invest in its infrastructure and create awareness campaigns to use less.
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, this has become a worldwide problem due to
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water’s
burgeoning demand. In this essay, I will illustrate the factors contributing to this trend and then elicit certain steps to control its demand.

There are compelling reasons for rising applications of fresh
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water
. The main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas. The global phenomenon of urbanization has compounded this demand for
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water
.
In addition
, since the beginning of industrialization,
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water
has been
increasingly
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used
for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipments and
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so
on.
Moreover
, large amounts of
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water
are being
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used
for recreational purposes.
For instance
, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts
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use
an avalanche of
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water
.
Therefore
,
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water
scarcity has risen and is
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now
a global problem.

However
, certain steps can
be taken
by
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governments
and individuals to
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stop
the surge in
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water
usage.
Firstly
, higher prices can
be enacted
for consuming large amounts of
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water
.
In addition
, tax deductions may be applicable to those using less.
Secondly
,
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governments
can invest in the infrastructure and
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water
purification plants to serve the public and organizations.
Finally
, awareness campaigns can
be organized
to educate the
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general public
to be stringent in
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water
usage.
Consequently
, these policies will
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help
in curbing the demand.

In conclusion
, the factors contributing to the burgeoning demand for
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water
are due to population explosion in cities, industrial activities and recreational purposes.
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governments
can enact higher prices and tax deductions depending on respective
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water
usage.
Also
, they can invest in its infrastructure and create awareness campaigns to
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use
less.
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IELTS letter Freshwater has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respon v. 5

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  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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