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As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information•regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition•the dates of its opening and closing v.2

As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information•regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition•the dates of its opening and closing v. 2
Dear Sir, I am John Gresham, a University of Bedfordshire student. The Dean has entrusted the responsibility to lead the group of graduates from my university to visit the historical exhibition forthcoming next month. I am writing this letter to gather some information regarding the event. Could you please let me know the sort of content and artifacts that would be available on display? Apparently, as Luton was once under the Scottish rule, would there be any exhibition of back-in-age Scottish traditional wear. Also, I would like to know the inaugural and closing dates of this historical affair along with the information about what the spectators can expect on each day. This would attract more participants from our university. Additionally, I would also like to know if there would be any items available at rebated prices or any discount that I offered on tickets when purchased as a group. Please, furnish information requested and any other details which would make the group’s trip exciting. Looking forward to your reply. Thank You, John Gresham
Dear Sir,

I am John Gresham, a University of
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Bedfordshire
student. The Dean has entrusted the responsibility to lead the group of graduates from my university to visit the historical exhibition forthcoming
next
month. I am writing this letter to gather
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some
information regarding the
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event
.

Could you
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please
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let
me know the sort of content and artifacts that would be available on display?
Apparently
, as
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Luton
was once under the Scottish
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rule
, would there be any exhibition of back-in-age Scottish traditional wear.

Also
, I would like to know the inaugural and closing dates of this historical affair along with the information about what the spectators can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
on each day. This would attract more participants from our university.

Additionally
, I would
also
like to know if there would be any items available at rebated prices or any discount that I offered on tickets when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
as a group.

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Please
, furnish information requested and any other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
which would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the group’s trip exciting. Looking forward to your reply.

Thank You,

John Gresham
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information•regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition•the dates of its opening and closing v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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