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You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter, introduce yourselfexplain what experience and special skills you havetell him/her when you think you could start v.7

You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter, introduce yourselfexplain what experience and special skills you havetell him/her when you think you could start v. 7
Dear Sir, My name is Paul Smith, a graduate student studying in St. Peters College, Mumbai. I am writing to seek a part-time job at the football club during evening hours. I was a part of the football team in my school at state level and have won many tournaments. I have played football for 5 years representing my school in different tournaments. My special skill in football is defending and fitness training. As a result, I would like to train students in the club and also regulate myself into the game. My summer vacations are starting from 1st August and I am willing like to start my job from the first day of my vacation. I will be obliged if you accept my application and consider me for the said role. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Paul Smith
Dear Sir,

My name is Paul Smith, a graduate student studying in St. Peters College, Mumbai.

I am writing to seek a part-time job at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
football
club during evening hours. I was a part of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
football
team in my school at state level and have won
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
tournaments.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have played
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
football
for 5 years representing my school in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
tournaments. My special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
football
is defending and fitness training.
As a result
, I would like to train students in the club and
also
regulate myself into the game.

My summer vacations are starting from 1st
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
August and
I am willing like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
my job from the
first
day of my vacation.

I will
be obliged
if you accept my application and consider me for the said role.

Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Thanking you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Paul Smith
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter, introduce yourselfexplain what experience and special skills you havetell him/her when you think you could start v. 7

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
144 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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