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Write a letter to invite a famous person to give a speech at a meeting in you youth club In your letter you should introduce your club explain why you want to invite him her tell him her about the arrangement for the meeting v.2

Write a letter to invite a famous person to give a speech at a meeting in you youth club In your letter you should introduce your club explain why you want to invite him her tell him her about the arrangement for the meeting v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith I am writing this letter to invite you to deliver a speech on the Annual day of the Sunshine youth club on the behalf of all the members of the club. Youth club named Sunshine not only aimed for the welfare of youngsters but also contributes in collecting donations for needy people for example, physically disabled, for care of old age, for the education of orphan children. Beside that we organise various social activities from time to time. On this Annual day, our club is raising funds for disabled people and on this auspicious occasion, you are the right personality to give a speech as you have denoted millions of dollars for the poor people. That is why, you will be an inspiration to the youth by encouraging them to donate more. The meeting is organised on next Sunday that is 5th of June. Your speech will start at 1 p. m. and last for half an hour. We will make all the arrangements to pick you up and drop at your residential place. Please manage to get some of your time for this event. I am looking forward to your response. Yours Sincerely John Thompson
Dear Mr. Smith

I am writing this letter to invite you to deliver a speech on the Annual day of the Sunshine youth club on the behalf of all the members of the club.

Youth club named Sunshine not
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only
aimed for the welfare of youngsters
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but
also
contributes in collecting donations for needy
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people
for example
,
physically
disabled, for care of
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old
age, for the education of orphan children. Beside that we
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organise
various social activities from time to time. On this Annual day, our club is raising funds for disabled
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people
and on this auspicious occasion, you are the right personality to give a speech as you have denoted millions of dollars for the poor
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people
.
That is
why, you will be an inspiration to the youth by encouraging them to donate more.

The meeting is
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organised
on
next
Sunday
that is
5th of June. Your speech will
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start
at 1 p. m. and last for half an hour. We will
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make
all the arrangements to pick you up and drop at your residential place.

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Please
manage to
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get
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some
of your time for this
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event
. I am looking forward to your response.

Yours
Sincerely


John Thompson
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to invite a famous person to give a speech at a meeting in you youth club In your letter you should introduce your club explain why you want to invite him her tell him her about the arrangement for the meeting v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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