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You are having some trouble with a work colleague. Write to your employer. In your letter: explain what the problem isdescribe how it is affecting youmake a suggestion about what could be done. v.2

You are having some trouble with a work colleague. Write to your employer. In your letter: explain what the problem isdescribe how it is affecting youmake a suggestion about what could be done. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to draw your attention to an issue I am facing with Mr. Aakash. Although Mr. Aakash is an experienced engineer, he has a careless attitude towards work. As I have worked with him in a team on different projects, I have to work for extra hours to complete his work because of his negligent behavior. I have told him that he should complete his work himself but he does not listen to me as I am junior to him. The worst part of working with him is that he does not appreciate my hard work and takes all the credit. Due to this extra burden of his work, I have to do overtime and therefore, cannot reach home on time. The work pressure has also started affecting my health as well as my family life. In addition, my mother seems not well these days and she needs extra care. To resolve this issue, I request you to talk to him. Since you are superior to him, he cannot neglect your orders. I hope you will understand my situation and do the needful at the earliest. Yours sincerely, Deepika Sharma.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to draw your attention to an issue I am facing with Mr.
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Aakash
.

Although Mr.
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Aakash
is an experienced engineer, he has a careless attitude towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. As I have worked with him in a team on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
projects, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for extra hours to complete his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of his negligent behavior. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
him that he should complete his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
himself
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
he does not listen to me as I am junior to him. The worst part of working with him is that he does not appreciate my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and takes all the credit.

Due to this extra burden of his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do overtime and
therefore
, cannot reach home on time. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
pressure has
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
affecting my health
as well
as my family life.
In addition
, my mother seems not well these
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
days and
she needs extra care.

To resolve this issue, I request you to talk to him. Since you are superior to him, he cannot neglect your orders.

I hope you will understand my situation and do the needful at the earliest.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Deepika
Sharma.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are having some trouble with a work colleague. Write to your employer. In your letter: explain what the problem isdescribe how it is affecting youmake a suggestion about what could be done. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
196 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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