04. 10. 2017work with mistakes. Your colleague from a different town is coming next month and you are moving out of your current accommodation. Write a letter to the colleague to recommend they move into your house and say– Why are you moving to another v.2
04. 10. 2017work with mistakes. Your colleague from a different town is coming next month and you are moving out of your current accommodation. Write a letter to the colleague to recommend they move into your house and say– Why are you moving to another v. 2
Dear John,
I heard from our colleagues you are being transferred to Dallas next month and I would like to help you with accommodation.
Recently, I got married and we decided to start our marital life in a new house. We are going to take a mortgage on a newly built two-story house that is situated on the outskirts of the megalopolis in a peaceful and calm neighborhood. In fact, the credit has been approved and we are going to move in soon. So, my old apartment will be available for rent.
The flat I recommend is located in a spectacular place. There is a riverside that is well-maintain and a big beautiful park.
Moreover, there are two cinema theaters, three nice restaurants, a gym and a big department store. In other words, all needed infrastructure and services are conveniently located nearby.
Furthermore, the landlord is a decent, old woman who will not cause you any troubles and the rent is reasonable. In average, apartments in this neighborhood cost about eight hundred dollars per month but the lady charges only five hundred.
If you like my idea, I will talk to the landlord as soon as I get your consent.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene. 
Dear John,
I heard from our colleagues you are  
being transferred
 to Dallas  
next
 month and I would like to  
help
 you with accommodation.
Recently, I  
got
  married and
 we decided to  
start
 our  
marital
 life in a new  
house
. We are going to take a mortgage on a  
newly
 built two-story  
house
 that  
is situated
 on the outskirts of the megalopolis in a peaceful and calm neighborhood. In fact, the credit has been  
approved and
 we are going to  
move
 in  
soon
.  
So
, my  
old
 apartment will be available for rent.
The flat I recommend  
is located
 in a spectacular place. There is a riverside  
that is
 well-maintain and a  
big
  beautiful
 park. 
Moreover
, there are two cinema theaters, three nice restaurants, a gym and a  
big
 department store.  
In other words
, all needed infrastructure and services are  
conveniently
 located nearby. 
Furthermore
, the landlord is a decent,  
old
 woman who will not cause you any troubles and the rent is reasonable. In average, apartments in this neighborhood cost about eight hundred dollars per month  
but
 the lady charges  
only
 five  
hundred
.
If you like my  
idea
, I will talk to the landlord as  
soon
 as I  
get
 your consent. 
Sincerely
 yours,
Eugene. 
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