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You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and in poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter• say what the v.1

You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and in poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter• say what the v. 1
Dear Mr. Smith, My name is Haki Nguyen and I am your next door neighbour. I am writing this letter to express my concerns about your pet dogs that are quite unfriendly and hostile in nature and we need a proper solution for this matter. To begin with, the dogs are particularly aggressive and bark incessantly at bystanders. Last Sunday, my children were playing in the backyard of our house and the dogs abruptly tried to intimidate them. Thanks to the fence in between, my children could manage to get back home safely. In light of the above incident, I think it is important for us to address the poor condition of the fence. The fence is in fundamental need of repair. So I propose that a new iron fence be erected that can act as an effective barrier to keep everybody safe, including the dogs. Finally, I would suggest that we split the associated installation cost of the new fence which would be beneficial for both the families. Good quality iron fence is expensive but it will pinch less if we both share the cost. Looking forward to hearing from you, Haki
Dear Mr. Smith,

My name is
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Haki
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Nguyen and
I am your
next
door
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neighbour
. I am writing this letter to express my concerns about your pet
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dogs
that are quite
unfriendly
and hostile in
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
nature and
we need a proper solution for this matter.

To
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begin
with, the
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dogs
are
particularly
aggressive and bark
incessantly
at bystanders. Last Sunday, my children were playing in the backyard of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dogs
abruptly
tried to intimidate them. Thanks to the
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fence
in between, my children could manage to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
back home
safely
.

In light of the above incident, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it is
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important
for us to address the poor condition of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fence
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fence
is in fundamental need of repair.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I propose that a new iron
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fence
be erected
that can act as an effective barrier to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
everybody safe, including the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dogs
.
Finally
, I would suggest that we split the associated installation cost of the new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fence
which would be beneficial for both the families.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Good
quality iron
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fence
is expensive
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it will pinch less if we both share the cost.

Looking forward to hearing from you,

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Haki
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and in poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter• say what the v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
192 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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