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Write a letter to your landlord who wants to increase the rent of the house you live in Tell him what you would do if he increases v.2

Write a letter to your landlord who wants to increase the rent of the house you live in Tell him what you would do if he increases v. 2
Dear Mr. Shah, I am writing in response to your notice to increase the rent of the apartment at Green Villa Avenue. In this letter, I state the reasons why the rent should not be raised in such a short duration. For this apartment, it was agreed that rentals would be revised only after 1 year, and it has been just 6 months since we started staying here. If you want I can show you the agreement letters that were signed by both of us. Moreover, it would be unfair to increase the rent by 5000 Rupees, which is too much seeing the economy of the country. Thus, I do not agree with you on this new cost. Apart from this, I have two children and they have started going school, which is nearby home. They are small and I do not prefer changing house now, so would urge you to re-consider this matter. Since I like the house and is convenient for my family, I would not wish to re-allocate. Although I do not wish, but if you do not agree on keeping the rent unchanged, I will be forced to take the legal action for creating havoc by rising the rent in mid of the year. I hope you give a thought on this and keep the rent as agreed before. Yours sincerely, XYZ.
Dear Mr. Shah,

I am writing in response to your notice to increase the
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rent
of the apartment at Green Villa Avenue. In this letter, I state the reasons why the
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rent
should not
be raised
in such a short duration.

For this apartment, it was
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agreed
that rentals would
be revised
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only
after 1 year, and it has been
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just
6 months since we
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started
staying here. If you want I can
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show
you the agreement letters that
were signed
by both of us.
Moreover
, it would be unfair to increase the
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rent
by 5000 Rupees, which is too much seeing the economy of the country.
Thus
, I do not
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agree
with you on this new cost.

Apart from this, I have two
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children and
they have
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started
going school, which is nearby home. They are
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small
and I do not prefer changing
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house
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now
,
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so
would urge you to re-consider this matter.

Since I like the
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house
and is convenient for my family, I would not wish to re-allocate. Although I do not wish,
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but
if you do not
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agree
on keeping the
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rent
unchanged, I will
be forced
to take the legal action for creating havoc by rising the
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rent
in mid of the year.

I hope you give a
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thought
on this and
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keep
the
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rent
as
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agreed
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before
.

Yours
sincerely
,

XYZ.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your landlord who wants to increase the rent of the house you live in Tell him what you would do if he increases v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
226 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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