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You have just moved into a new house and you have decided to have a party. You are worried that the noise from your party will annoy your new neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: •Introduce yourself•Explain that you plan to have v.1

You have just moved into a new house and you have decided to have a party. You are worried that the noise from your party will annoy your new neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: •Introduce yourself•Explain that you plan to have v. 1
Dear Carole, As you may have noticed, I’ve just moved into the property next to yours and Dan- the previous tenant- gave me your name. I hope you don’t mind me writing. As Dan might have mentioned, I’m a trainee accountant with a motorbike and a pet parrot. Firstly, can I apologise if I’ve disturbed you over the past couple of days? I’ve been dragging heavy items of furniture about. I’m really sorry if you’ve been bothered by the banging and clattering. The main reason for writing is to let you know that I plan to hold a house-warming party this coming Saturday. I’ve invited friends and colleagues. I will try to make sure it isn’t too rowdy but it might go on into the small hours. I’d love it if you could come. There’s no need to bring anything except yourself. Don’t worry if you’re not free. You’d be extremely welcome to pop round another day. I look forward to seeing you really soon (and just knock on the wall if I’m making too much noise! ) Best wishes James
Dear Carole,

As you may have noticed, I’ve
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to yours and Dan- the previous tenant- gave me your name. I hope you don’t mind me writing. As Dan might have mentioned, I’m a trainee accountant with a motorbike and a pet parrot.

Firstly
, can I
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apologise
if I’ve disturbed you over the past couple of days? I’ve been dragging heavy items of furniture about. I’m
really
sorry if you’ve
been bothered
by the banging and clattering.

The main reason for writing is to
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let
you know that I plan to hold a
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house
-warming party this coming Saturday. I’ve invited friends and colleagues. I will try to
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make
sure it isn’t too rowdy
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but
it might go on into the
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small
hours.
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I
’d
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it if you could
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come
. There’s no need to bring anything except yourself. Don’t worry if you’re not free. You’d be
extremely
welcome to pop round another day.

I look forward to seeing you
really
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soon
(and
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just
knock on the wall if I’m making too much noise!
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Best wishes

James
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just moved into a new house and you have decided to have a party. You are worried that the noise from your party will annoy your new neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: •Introduce yourself•Explain that you plan to have v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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