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A new neighbour has moved in next door and has taken your main rubbish bin. Write a letter to your new neighbour requesting that they return the item. In the letter: – Explain that new bins must be sourced from the local council– Request that the person v.2

A new neighbour has moved in next door and has taken your main rubbish bin. Write a letter to your new neighbour requesting that they return the item. In the letter: – Explain that new bins must be sourced from the local council– Request that the person v. 2
Dear Mrs. Braganza, I am writing this letter to express my disapproval over the main rubbish bin that was standing in front of my street. As you are new to this neighborhood, I assume that you are not aware about the functioning of the rubbish bins. New rubbish bins are sourced from the local council upon request and every house is to have a separate rubbish bin of their own. You can write or personally visit the local council to request for a new bin. It seems that unknowingly you have taken my bin for your use. I request that you return the bin back to us immediately as I have been finding it extremely difficult to clear out my wastes. The garbage truck will only clear out the rubbish from the main bins and we being a family of 6, waste piles up in no time. I expect that the bin be returned on receipt of this letter, if not then I will have to file a case against you with the building Society Manager, who may ask you to pay a fine for the trouble caused. . To avoid this consequence, please do as requested. I will be waiting for my bin to be returned as soon as possible. Kind regards, Malita
Dear Mrs.
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Braganza
,

I am writing this letter to express my disapproval over the main
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rubbish
bin that was standing in front of my street.

As you are new to this neighborhood, I assume that you are not aware about the functioning of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rubbish
bins. New
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rubbish
bins
are sourced
from the local council upon request and every
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house
is to have a separate
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rubbish
bin of their
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own
. You can write or
personally
visit the local council to request for a new bin.

It seems that
unknowingly
you have taken my bin for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
. I request that you return the bin back to us immediately as I have been finding it
extremely
difficult to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
out my wastes. The garbage truck will
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only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
out the
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rubbish
from the main
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
bins and
we being a family of 6, waste piles up in no time.

I
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expect
that the bin
be returned
on receipt of this letter, if not then I will
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have to
file a case against you with the building Society Manager, who may ask you to pay a fine for the trouble caused.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
To avoid this consequence,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
do as requested.

I will be waiting for my bin to
be returned
as
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soon
as possible.

Kind regards,

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Malita
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter A new neighbour has moved in next door and has taken your main rubbish bin. Write a letter to your new neighbour requesting that they return the item. In the letter: – Explain that new bins must be sourced from the local council– Request that the person v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
213 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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