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You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v.2

You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 2

Dear Mr Albert, I am writing to thank you for agreeing to be my English and Homestay host. I would really appreciate some information from you and would like to inform you that I will arrive at your house in New Zeland in July. I am Jacques Gordon, a French by nationality, but currently pursuing my graduation in accounting at the London University in the UK. My parents and siblings live in Paris. I enrolled in the "English and Homestay program" a few months ago and my intention was to take the opportunity to learn the language efficiently. I would be glad to know about you - more specifically what you do and how many members do you have in your family and so on. I would also like to know about some traditions and formalities you respect in New Zeland. I will be travelling to New Zealand for the first time and hence your suggestion about the etiquettes of being a guest would be highly appreciated. My expected arrival date is on 19th August 2020 and the flight is scheduled to reach Wellington Airport at 6. 00 pm local time. It would be great if you could fetch me from the airport. If you have another schedule, I would take a taxi to your address. I am really looking forward to spending some quality time with you and your family. Please write to me at your convenience. Yours Sincerely, Jacques Gordon

Dear Mr Albert,

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some
 information from you and would like to inform you that I will arrive at your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
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 in July.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am Jacques Gordon, a French by nationality, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
currently
 pursuing my graduation in accounting at the London University in the UK. My parents and siblings This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in Paris. I enrolled in the Use a smart opening quote here: "“".“
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English and Homestay programUse a smart closing quote here: "”".”
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 a few months ago and my intention was to take the opportunity to learn the language efficiently
.

I would be glad to know about you Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
-
 more specifically
 what you do and how This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 members do you have in your family and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 on. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 would also
 like to know about This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 traditions and formalities you respect in New Possible spelling mistake found.ZealandLelandElandZ elandZeeland
Zeland
. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 will be travelling to New Zealand for the first
 time and hence
 your suggestion about the Possible spelling mistake found.etiquettenetiquettes
etiquettes
 of being a guest would be highly
 appreciated.

My This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipated
expected
 arrival date is on The given date is in the future, but the verb is in past tense.
19th August 2020
 and the flight is scheduled
 to reach Wellington Airport at 6. 00 pm local time. It would be great if you could fetch me from the airport. If you have another schedule, I would take a taxi to your address.

I am really
 looking forward to spending This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 quality time with you and your family. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 write to me at your convenience.

Yours Sincerely
,

Jacques Gordon

5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 2

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

241 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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