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You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v.8

You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 8
Dear Mr and Mrs Ericsson, I hope you are doing great. I am Eoghan Antonio from Italy, would like to thank you for granting my application to host me for the English and Homestay programme at your house. This is something I have been so eagerly looking forward to and I thank you profoundly for the opportunity. I am writing for some information and to confirm my arrival date. I will be your guest for a month as part of the 'English and Homestay' program in Hamilton, New Zealand. I am a fresher at the University of Turin and I speak both Italian and Spanish. I am really excited to visit your country and be your humble guest. This would an excellent opportunity to learn the language, culture and the way of life in New Zealand. However, I am curious to know about a few things before my arrival at your house. To start, how can I reach from the airport to your house? Should I take a taxi or request a ride from Uber? I will reach the airport on 9th November 2020 at 11: 30 am. Would it be possible for you to come to the airport to receive me? Besides, what is the current weather conditions in your city? What types of clothing are suitable for this season? I will be boarding the flight to New Zealand on 8th November at 10: 45 am (GST time) and land there the next day around 11: 30 am. Eagerly waiting to meet you in person. Sincerely yours, Eoghan Antonio
Dear Mr and Mrs Ericsson,

I hope you are doing great. I am
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Eoghan
Antonio from Italy, would like to thank you for granting my application to host me for the English and Homestay
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programme
at your
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house
. This is something I have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
eagerly
looking forward to and I thank you
profoundly
for the opportunity. I am writing for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information and to confirm my arrival date.

I will be your guest for a month as part of the 'English and Homestay' program in Hamilton, New Zealand.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am a fresher at the University of Turin and I speak both Italian and Spanish.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
really
excited to visit your country and be your humble guest. This would an excellent opportunity to learn the language, culture and the way of life in New Zealand.
However
, I am curious to know about a few things
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
my arrival at your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
, how can I reach from the airport to your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
? Should I take a taxi or request a ride from Uber? I will reach the airport on 9th November 2020 at 11: 30 am. Would it be possible for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the airport to receive me?
Besides
, what is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
weather conditions in your city? What types of clothing are suitable for this season?

I will be boarding the flight to New Zealand on 8th November at 10: 45 am (GST time) and land there the
next
day around 11: 30 am.

Eagerly
waiting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in person.

Sincerely
yours,

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Eoghan
Antonio
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 8

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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