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You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v.7

You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 7
Dear Mr Johnson, I have just received details of my English Homestay programme at your family and writing to introduce myself and ask for some information. I would like to thank you for agreeing to host me. My name is Anna Ferra, I am 21 and live with my family in Lyon, France, which is my hometown. My native language is French and I am looking forward to improving my English during the trip to New Zealand. I will get enrolled in university soon and I am passionate about computer programming. I would be grateful if you could provide me with some information about your house and family. To begin with, I would prefer to live in a single room which has enough natural airflow. Besides, I am a vegetarian and hope that it would not be a big problem for you. Secondly, I would like to learn more about your family’s daily routines, like the games you like to play together, the type of TV programmes you watch and so on. This could help me to participate in all your routines like a relative. I am very eager to meet you in person. By the way, I have already bought the plane ticket and would be happy if you could meet me at the airport. This is my first time in New Zealand. I will hopefully arrive on September 18, at 10: 00 am, Wellington time. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely yours, Anna Ferra
Dear Mr Johnson,

I have
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received
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details
of my English Homestay
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programme
at your
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family
and writing to introduce myself and
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ask for
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some
information. I would like to thank you for agreeing to host me.

My name is Anna
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Ferra
, I am 21 and
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live
with my
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family
in Lyon, France, which is my hometown. My native language is
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French and
I am looking forward to improving my English during the trip to New Zealand. I will
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get
enrolled in university
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soon and
I am passionate about computer programming.

I would be grateful if you could provide me with
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some
information about your
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house
and
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family
. To
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begin
with, I would prefer to
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live
in a single room which has
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enough
natural airflow.
Besides
, I am a vegetarian and hope that it would not be a
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big
problem for you.
Secondly
, I would like to learn more about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family’s
daily routines, like the games you like to play together, the type of TV
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programmes
you
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watch
and
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so
on. This could
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help
me to participate in all your routines like a relative.

I am
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very
eager to
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meet
you in person. By the way, I have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plane
ticket and would be happy if you could
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meet
me at the airport. This is my
first
time in New Zealand. I will
hopefully
arrive on September 18, at 10: 00 am, Wellington time.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Sincerely
yours,

Anna
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Ferra
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 7

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  American English
8 paragraphs
249 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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