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You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v.6

You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 6
Dear Mr and Mrs Smith, I'm Milad Rahimi from India, have recently registered for two-weeks English Homestay programme at your house in New Zealand. I am fascinated to have you as my mentor during the programme. I really appreciate your letter that I received yesterday and writing for some information and to notify you of my arrival date. I am really delighted that you have agreed to host me for the programme. This will definitely enable me to fully immerse myself in the English Culture and further enhance my understanding of your tradition and way of life. As I am coming to New Zealand for the first time, I am not familiar with the weather and I don’t know what kind of clothes I should bring with me. Would you please suggest me on that? I would also like to inform you that I am a vegetarian. Moreover, I need your suggestion about the things I should bring with me to your house. Finally, I would appreciate your advice on the type of books I should read about New Zealand that might help me understand your culture. I will arrive in Auckland on 20th September at around 7: 30 pm if my flight makes no delay. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours Sincerely, Milad Rahimi
Dear Mr and Mrs Smith,

I'm
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Milad
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Rahimi
from India, have recently registered for two-weeks English Homestay
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programme
at your
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house
in New Zealand. I
am fascinated
to have you as my mentor during the
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programme
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
really
appreciate your letter that I received yesterday and writing for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information and to notify you of my arrival date.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
really
delighted that you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
to host me for the
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
. This will definitely enable me to
fully
immerse myself in the English Culture and
further
enhance my understanding of your tradition and way of life. As I am coming to New Zealand for the
first
time, I am not familiar with the weather and I don’t know what kind of clothes I should bring with me. Would you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
suggest me on that? I would
also
like to inform you that I am a vegetarian.
Moreover
, I need your suggestion about the things I should bring with me to your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
Finally
, I would appreciate your advice on the type of books I should read about New Zealand that might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me understand your culture.

I will arrive in Auckland on 20th September at around 7: 30 pm if my flight
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
no delay.

I look forward to meeting you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Milad
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Rahimi
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 6

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
216 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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