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You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v.6

You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 6

Dear Mr and Mrs Smith, I'm Milad Rahimi from India, have recently registered for two-weeks English Homestay programme at your house in New Zealand. I am fascinated to have you as my mentor during the programme. I really appreciate your letter that I received yesterday and writing for some information and to notify you of my arrival date. I am really delighted that you have agreed to host me for the programme. This will definitely enable me to fully immerse myself in the English Culture and further enhance my understanding of your tradition and way of life. As I am coming to New Zealand for the first time, I am not familiar with the weather and I don’t know what kind of clothes I should bring with me. Would you please suggest me on that? I would also like to inform you that I am a vegetarian. Moreover, I need your suggestion about the things I should bring with me to your house. Finally, I would appreciate your advice on the type of books I should read about New Zealand that might help me understand your culture. I will arrive in Auckland on 20th September at around 7: 30 pm if my flight makes no delay. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours Sincerely, Milad Rahimi

Dear Mr and Mrs Smith,

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Milad
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 from India, have recently registered for two-weeks English Homestay Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.program
programme
 at your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 in New Zealand. I am fascinated
 to have you as my mentor during the Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.program
programme
. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
really
 appreciate your letter that I received yesterday and writing for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 information and to notify you of my arrival date.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am really
 delighted that you have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesced
agreed
 to host me for the Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.program
programme
. This will definitely enable me to fully
 immerse myself in the English Culture and further
 enhance my understanding of your tradition and way of life. As I am coming to New Zealand for the first
 time, I am not familiar with the weather and I don’t know what kind of clothes I should bring with me. Would you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 suggest me on that? I would also
 like to inform you that I am a vegetarian. Moreover
, I need your suggestion about the things I should bring with me to your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
. Finally
, I would appreciate your advice on the type of books I should read about New Zealand that might This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me understand your culture.

I will arrive in Auckland on 20th September at around 7: 30 pm if my flight This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
 no delay.

I look forward to meeting you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours Sincerely
,

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Milad
Possible spelling mistake found.Rahim
Rahimi

5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. v. 6

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

216 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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