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You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situationdescribe the accommodati v.4

You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situationdescribe the accommodati v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am honored that I am joining a vocational training course at your college in Greenmount, Ireland. I am writing this letter to request an accommodation which should be within 3 miles of campus. I am from India and working as a Software Engineer with the Gooogle. I would prefer to have an apartment off-campus because they will be cheap. It will be my first time that I will be out of the country for studies on my own so I need a single room in a family house if possible Indian family. I won' t be having a problem to share the washroom and the kitchen area, and I am vegetarian. My course duration is of 2 months and it will be fine to have a room for 2 months 15 days. I will be coming on 26th June and leave by 15th September but it should provide basic amenities like washing machine, microwave and air conditioner due to summer. Would you be able to send me a few samples? I would connect to the owner and make the advance payments if necessary. Is it fine if I bring my own kitchen utensils as I am uncomfortable to use any other? Please let me know if you have any queries regarding my essential items. I am waiting to hear from you soon. Your' s Faithfully Apoorva Chikara
Dear Sir or Madam,

I
am honored
that I am joining a vocational training course at your college in
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Greenmount
, Ireland. I am writing this letter to request an accommodation which should be within
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3 miles
of campus.
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I
am from India and working as a Software Engineer with the
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Gooogle
.
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I
would prefer to have an apartment off-campus
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because
they will be
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cheap
.

It will be my
first
time that I will be out of the country for studies on my
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own
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so
I need a single room in a family
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house
if possible Indian family. I
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won&
#039; t be having a problem to share the washroom and the kitchen area, and I am vegetarian. My course duration is of 2 months and it will be fine to have a room for 2 months 15 days. I will be coming on 26th June and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
by 15th September
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it should provide basic amenities like washing machine, microwave and air conditioner due to summer.

Would you be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me a few samples? I would connect to the owner and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the advance payments if necessary. Is it fine if I bring my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
kitchen utensils as I am uncomfortable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
any other?
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if you have any queries regarding my essential items.

I am waiting to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

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Your&
#039; s
Faithfully


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Apoorva
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Chikara
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situationdescribe the accommodati v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
231 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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