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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, •give details of your course and your arrival/departure date•explain your accomm v.1

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, •give details of your course and your arrival/departure date•explain your accomm v. 1

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you enquire about accommodation for short term in your hostel. Currently, I am pursuing MBA degree at Cal State University. I have been selected for short course on management skills in Quincy college. My short course will start on 1st September and will end on 31st December. I will be in the UK on 25 August and I will be leaving on 2nd January. I need accommodation starting from 25th August to 5th January. It should have independent bathroom and study room. It would be very nice if student living with me should have to study similar course. I really need independent room so at least I can study quietly. I also need more information about transportation from college to the hostel as I see it is little far from college. Would it possible to go to college using public transport? Would you provide any transport service for students from college to the hostel? I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Peter Allison

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.inquire
enquire
 about accommodation for short term in your hostel. Currently
, I am pursuing MBA degree at Cal State University. I have been selected
 for short course on management This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 in Quincy college. My short course will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 on 1st September and will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 on 31st December. I will be in the UK on 25 August and I will be leaving on 2nd January.

I need accommodation starting from 25th August to 5th January. It should have independent bathroom and study room. It would be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 nice if student living with me should This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 study similar course. I really
 need independent room This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 at least I can study quietly
.

I also
 need more information about transportation from college to the hostel as I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 far from college. Would It seems that a verb is missing. Did you mean "it be possible"?it be possible
it possible
 to go to college using public transport? Would you provide any transport service for students from college to the hostel?

I look forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours faithfully
,

Peter Allison

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, •give details of your course and your arrival/departure date•explain your accomm v. 1

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

173 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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