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You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not your originallanguage. You have a friend who speaks this new language perfectly. Write to your friend, Explaining why you want to learn this new languageAsking him/her for sugges v.2

You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not your originallanguage. You have a friend who speaks this new language perfectly. Write to your friend, Explaining why you want to learn this new languageAsking him/her for sugges v. 2
Dear Rick, I am sure you are doing good! How is family? I am writing to ask for your help with French. Who else could be better than a friend with graduation degree in French Literature? Let me tell you why all of a sudden, I want to learn French, actually I am planning to immigrate to Canada, and a good score in French International Language Test can increase my chances of immigration clearance. I am a total non-geek when it comes to french so I would need your guidence to understand that where should i start my learning from - Should i enrol for a classroom learning program or the online learning would be enough. Furthermore, as I need to sit for this exam as early as possible please share some tips and trick which can help me in learning the language quickly. Finally, I wanted to tell you that I will be visiting your city next week for a business meeting and I would like to meet you. It has been a long time since we last meet and this will also give me a chance to discuss with you face to face, my french learning plan. Let me know if you will be able to take out some time from work for our catch-up. With regards, Harinder
Dear Rick,

I am sure you are doing
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good
! How is family?

I am writing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with French. Who else could be better than a friend with graduation degree in French Literature?
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Let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you why all of a sudden, I want to learn French, actually I am planning to immigrate to Canada, and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
score in French International Language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Test
can increase my chances of immigration clearance.

I am a total non-geek when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to french
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I would need your
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guidence
to understand that where should
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
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start
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
from
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
Should
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
enrol for a classroom
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
program or the online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
.
Furthermore
, as I need to sit for this exam as early as possible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
tips and
Did you mean "tricks"?
trick
which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
the language
quickly
.

Finally
, I wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that I will be visiting your city
next
week for a business meeting and I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you. It has been a long time since we last
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
and this will
also
give me a chance to discuss with you face to face, my
"French" needs to be capitalized when not used as a verb.
french
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
plan.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know if you will be able to take out
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time from work for our catch-up.

With regards,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Harinder
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not your originallanguage. You have a friend who speaks this new language perfectly. Write to your friend, Explaining why you want to learn this new languageAsking him/her for sugges v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
219 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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