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A friend had a newborn baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit a friend to give it to him/ her. write a letter including the following points. . congratulation your friend. Tell him why you picked yo the mentioned present. sugges v.1

A friend had a newborn baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit a friend to give it to him/ her. write a letter including the following points. . congratulation your friend. Tell him why you picked yo the mentioned present. sugges v. 1
Dear Leela, I am thrilled to hear that you have given the birth of your first child safely. I saw her pictures on Instagram. She is really adorable. Please accept my heartiest congratulation on this glorious occasion. I am sure she will make you bask in the glory of good future all through your life. I regret my inadequacy as I cannot meet you early. As a matter of fact, I came to Tokyo to attend an official meeting on Monday. My tasks will occupy me here for another week. I will return to Delhi on 27th October. I am planning to visit you on Friday, the 28th of October, at around 4 p. m. Thus, please let me know if it is convenient for you. In case, you have any other plan on Friday, I can come later as well. Finally, I cannot wait to see you and your kid. I have already bought a gift for her. I checked out several, eventually, selected a carrycot as I found it quite helpful for a little. Once again I congratulate you on your well-deserved happiness. Best Wishes, Kirti
Dear
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Leela
,

I
am thrilled
to hear that you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the birth of your
first
child
safely
. I
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saw
her pictures on Instagram. She is
really
adorable.
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Please
accept my heartiest congratulation on this glorious occasion. I am sure she will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
you bask in the glory of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
future all through your life.

I regret my inadequacy as I cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you early. As a matter of fact, I came to Tokyo to attend an official meeting on Monday. My tasks will occupy me here for another week. I will return to Delhi on 27th October. I am planning to visit you on Friday, the 28th of October, at around 4 p. m.
Thus
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if it is convenient for you. In case, you have any other plan on Friday, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
later
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
well.

Finally
, I cannot wait to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you and your kid. I have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
a gift for her. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
out several,
eventually
, selected a carrycot as I found it quite helpful for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
.

“Once” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Once
again I congratulate you on your well-deserved happiness.

Best Wishes,

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Kirti
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend had a newborn baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit a friend to give it to him/ her. write a letter including the following points. . congratulation your friend. Tell him why you picked yo the mentioned present. sugges v. 1

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7 paragraphs
187 words
6.0
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