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You are bored in your current job but you enjoy working for your company. You think you would be happier if you moved to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be moved to a position in another v.2

You are bored in your current job but you enjoy working for your company. You think you would be happier if you moved to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be moved to a position in another v. 2
Dear Sir, My name is Harpal Singh and I work as a software engineer in the product engineering department. I am writing this letter to request you to move me to the artificial intelligence department. I am fulfilling my roles and responsibilities in my current job, but I am not satisfied with growth opportunities available in this job. This is because my current work mainly involves repetitive work and there is no scope innovation in this place. There are multiple reasons for this ask. Firstly, I have good earlier experience in artificial intelligence, therefore this movement will not only help me build on that experience, but also will add a good asset to that department. Additionally, since I have been actively following up the recent trends in the field of artificial intelligence, I will not need any more training for the job. So I kindly request you to move me to the artificial intelligence department. Yours Faithfully, Harpal Singh
Dear Sir,

My name is
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Harpal
Singh and I work as a software engineer in the product engineering department. I am writing this letter to request you to
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move
me to the artificial
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intelligence
department.

I am fulfilling my roles and responsibilities in my
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current
job,
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but
I am not satisfied with growth opportunities available in this job. This is
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because
my
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current
work
mainly
involves repetitive work and there is no scope innovation in this place.

There are multiple reasons for this ask.
Firstly
, I have
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good
earlier experience in artificial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
intelligence
,
therefore
this movement will not
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only
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help
me build on that experience,
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but
also
will
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add
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
asset to that department.
Additionally
, since I have been
actively
following up the recent trends in the field of artificial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
intelligence
, I will not need any more training for the job.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I kindly request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
me to the artificial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
intelligence
department.

Yours
Faithfully
,

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Harpal
Singh
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are bored in your current job but you enjoy working for your company. You think you would be happier if you moved to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be moved to a position in another v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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