Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You are attending a training program in a foreign country. Write to your manager and say that you want to stay longer in that country for personal reasons. Include the following in your letter: – How did you benefit from the training program? – Why do y v.2

You are attending a training program in a foreign country. Write to your manager and say that you want to stay longer in that country for personal reasons. Include the following in your letter: – How did you benefit from the training program? – Why do y v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith, I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to request an extension for my current leave in Paris in order to visit some historic places and museums. Initially, the training course was immensely beneficial. Since the instructor is experienced and has magnificent illustration abilities, we gained substantial amounts of knowledge and cognition in the field of software security. Furthermore, the provided material clarifies all the main points mentioning every detail, so, if the employees forget a specific part from the given course, they will find it easily by doing a quick search through these notebooks. Actually, the weather here is fascinating and the country is vastly picturesque due to the existence of mountains and landscapes everywhere. So, I wonder if you can permit an extension in the favor of visiting some historic places and enjoy the awesome climate. Finally, because of the due date of the current project, I would not spend more than a week here so as to return by the 15th of July. In addition, I can work remotely for 4 hours daily to complete as many tasks as I could, to reduce< span class=" hiddenSuggestion" pre=" to " > < /span> the pressure on my colleagues. Thanks a lot for your consideration. Yours sincerely, Mark Ryan
Dear Mr. Smith,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to request an extension for my
current
leave
in Paris in order to visit
some
historic places and museums.

Initially
, the training course was
immensely
beneficial. Since the instructor
is experienced
and has magnificent illustration abilities, we gained substantial amounts of knowledge and cognition in the field of software security.
Furthermore
, the provided material clarifies all the main points mentioning every detail,
so
, if the employees forget a specific part from the
given
course, they will find it
easily
by doing a quick search through these notebooks.

Actually, the weather here is fascinating and the country is
vastly
picturesque due to the existence of mountains and landscapes everywhere.
So
, I wonder if you can permit an extension in the favor of visiting
some
historic places and enjoy the awesome climate.

Finally
,
because
of the due date of the
current
project, I would not spend more than a week here
so as to
return by the 15th of July.
In addition
, I can work
remotely
for 4 hours daily to complete as
many
tasks as I could, to
reduce&lt
; span
class
=
&quot
;
hiddenSuggestion&quot
;
pre
=
&quot
; to
&quot
;
&gt
;
&lt
; /
span&gt
; the pressure on my colleagues.

Thanks a lot for your consideration.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mark Ryan
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS letter You are attending a training program in a foreign country. Write to your manager and say that you want to stay longer in that country for personal reasons. Include the following in your letter: – How did you benefit from the training program? – Why do y v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts