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You and your colleagues just came back from a foreign language training. Write aletter to the manager and say– explain how you and your colleagues enjoyed the training– suggest more training sessions in the future– say when and where it should be co v.2

You and your colleagues just came back from a foreign language training. Write aletter to the manager and say– explain how you and your colleagues enjoyed the training– suggest more training sessions in the future– say when and where it should be co v. 2
Dear Sanju, I am very pleased with the information that we have attent the International language training held on 28th April 2018 in Association Center, Delhi. First up all, they have conducted a lot of fun activities during a training session. Especially quiz competition made the more enjoyable event. Overall participants around 400 that they have split into 10 groups. Competiton happened between this 10 groups. We have really mesmerized about the training center because they have decorated well based on the training content that more meaningful. The main part is that they have explained about how to communicate with the stockholders. This is really helping our projects to manage with our customers. I am really requesting you to arrange the same training programs for every quarterly in order that all the employees will get the benefit and company growth also will increase it. I hope that you will arrange the same session for all our team members. Yours Faithfully, John
Dear
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Sanju
,

I am
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very
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pleased
with the information that we have
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attent
the International language
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training
held on 28th April 2018 in Association Center, Delhi.

First
up all, they have conducted
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a lot of
fun activities during a
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training
session.
Especially
quiz competition made the more enjoyable
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event
.
Overall
participants around 400 that they have split into 10 groups.
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Competiton
happened between this 10 groups. We have
really
mesmerized about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
center
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they have decorated well based on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
content that more meaningful.

The main part is that they have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
about how to communicate with the stockholders. This is
really
helping our projects to manage with our customers. I am
really
requesting you to arrange the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
programs for every quarterly in order that all the employees will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the benefit and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
growth
also
will increase it.

I hope that you will arrange the same session for all our team members.

Yours
Faithfully
,

John
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You and your colleagues just came back from a foreign language training. Write aletter to the manager and say– explain how you and your colleagues enjoyed the training– suggest more training sessions in the future– say when and where it should be co v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
160 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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