Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to inform you that one of my colleagues has a negative influence on my work and the overall development of the project.
Maria Crank who is responsible for statistics and calculations in the project is always out of schedule, when her part is needed it is always unfinished or done poorly. Moreover, her calculations are often erroneous and I simply cannot be trusted; so, I must check them each time.
Furthermore, other co-workers who participate to the project have similar complaints about Maria as well. In fact, Mark had to spend both weekends working in the office because of her mistake with statistics. Furthermore, she frequently takes several sick days in a row and in order to stay in the schedule we have to share her part among us. That really slows us down.
I have a reason to think that she may be dangerous for the success of the project and replacing her with Tim Cook from the sales department will solve the problem. Tim has already worked in several big projects and has proven himself as reliable and smart employee. If Tim cannot participate to our team, her part may be given to outsourcers. There is a well-known internet firm that provides businesses with such services. If you are interested, I may conduct a small research about conditions on which the firm is working.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to inform you that one of my colleagues has a
negative
influence on my work and the
overall
development of the project.
Maria Crank who is responsible for statistics and calculations in the
project
is always out of schedule, when her part
is needed
it is always unfinished or done
poorly
.
Moreover
, her calculations are
often
erroneous and I
simply
cannot
be trusted
;
so
, I
must
check
them each time.
Furthermore
, other co-workers who
participate to
the
project
have similar complaints about Maria
as well
. In fact, Mark had to spend both weekends working in the office
because
of her mistake with statistics.
Furthermore
, she
frequently
takes several sick days in a row and in order to stay in the schedule we
have to
share her part among us. That
really
slows us down.
I have a reason to
think
that she may be
dangerous
for the success of the
project
and replacing her with Tim Cook from the sales department will solve the problem. Tim has already worked in several
big
projects
and has proven himself as reliable and smart employee. If Tim cannot
participate to
our team, her part may be
given
to
outsourcers
. There is a well-known internet firm that provides businesses with such services. If you
are interested
, I may conduct a
small
research about conditions on which the firm is working.
Sincerely
yours,
Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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