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You are about to star social-meeting in a particular area where people from different nationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of local newspaper requesting him to publish information about this: •What activities you have to planned•Wh v.2

You are about to star social-meeting in a particular area where people from different nationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of local newspaper requesting him to publish information about this: •What activities you have to planned•Wh v. 2
Dear Sir, I am Mohit Sharma, the president of the local Rotract Club. Our club is organising seminars in which delegates from different nationalities will be taking part. We would be very thankful if you would give adequate space about our activities in the columns of your esteemed daily so that we get the maximum participation and support of local people. We shall be touching various social issues in our meetings. Besides the cultural exchange, which shall automatically be there, we shall be touching issues like environmental pollution, drug trafficking, child abuse, female foeticide and so on. We have also planned a career counselling camp which shall run for a whole week. The first meeting is on 10th June 2011; the venue is Club Cabana and the theme is ‘Global Culture versus Traditional Culture’. We would look forward to your presence in this meeting. All the club members are working whole heartedly for these meetings. It is a matter of great pride for a small town like ours to organise such world class events. Through the power of your pen, you can help us in spreading a word about our activities. Thanking you in anticipation. Yours faithfully, Mohit Sharma
Dear Sir,

I am
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Mohit
Sharma, the president of the local
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Rotract
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Club
. Our
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club
is
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organising


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seminars
in which delegates from
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different
nationalities will be taking part. We
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would


be
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very
thankful if you would give adequate space about our activities in the columns

of your esteemed daily
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so
that we
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get
the maximum participation and support of local

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people
.

We shall be touching various social issues in our meetings.
Besides
the
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cultural


exchange, which shall
automatically
be there, we shall be touching issues like

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environmental
pollution, drug trafficking, child abuse, female
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foeticide
and
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so
on. We

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have
also
planned a career counselling camp which shall run for a whole week.

The
first
meeting is on 10th June 2011; the venue is
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Club
Cabana and the theme is

‘Global Culture versus Traditional Culture’. We would look forward to your presence
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in


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this
meeting.

All the
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club
members are working whole
heartedly
for these meetings. It is a matter
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of


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great
pride for a
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small
town like ours to
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organise
such world
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class
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events
. Through
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the


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power
of your pen, you can
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help
us in spreading a word about our activities.

Thanking you in anticipation.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mohit
Sharma
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS letter You are about to star social-meeting in a particular area where people from different nationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of local newspaper requesting him to publish information about this: •What activities you have to planned•Wh v. 2

Letter
  American English
19 paragraphs
198 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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