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You are about to start social meetings in a particular area where people from differentnationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper requestinghim to publish information about this: -- What activities you have planned- When v.2

You are about to start social meetings in a particular area where people from differentnationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper requestinghim to publish information about this: -- What activities you have planned- When v. 2
Dear Sir, I am Balzhan Issakhanova, the president of local Toastmasters Club. I am writing with request to place an announcement in your newspaper about our new club in Istanbul to raise awareness about the club, get the maximum participation and support. Toastmasters International is a non-profit organization that empowers individuals to become more effective communicators and leaders. By attending bi-weekly meetings Toastmasters members can improve their speaking and leadership skills in a supportive atmosphere. In addition, it is a great opportunity to improve English as meetings are conducted in English and attended by people from different countries. The first meeting is on 6th of November 2018 at 7. 00 pm and the consecutive meetings will be held on every first and third Tuesdays of the month at the same time. The venue is Hotel Kadikoy in big conference room on the second floor. Thanking you in anticipation, Yours faithfully, Balzhan Issakhanova
Dear Sir,

I am
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Balzhan
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Issakhanova
, the president of local Toastmasters Club. I am writing with request to place an announcement in your newspaper about our new club in Istanbul to raise awareness about the club,
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get
the maximum participation and support.

Toastmasters International is a non-profit organization that empowers individuals to become more effective communicators and leaders. By attending bi-weekly
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meetings
Toastmasters members can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their speaking and leadership
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
in a supportive atmosphere.
In addition
, it is a great opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
English as
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meetings
are conducted
in English and attended by
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people
from
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different
countries.

The
first
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meeting
is on 6th of November 2018 at 7. 00 pm and the consecutive
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meetings
will
be held
on every
first
and third Tuesdays of the month at the same time. The venue is Hotel
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Kadikoy
in
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big
conference room on the second floor.

Thanking you in anticipation,

Yours
faithfully
,

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Balzhan
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Issakhanova
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are about to start social meetings in a particular area where people from differentnationalities can take part. Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper requestinghim to publish information about this: -- What activities you have planned- When v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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