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You have recently switched your jobExplain to a friend•Why you changed job•Describe your new job•Tell him your other news v.2

You have recently switched your jobExplain to a friend•Why you changed job•Describe your new job•Tell him your other news v. 2
Dear Sam, I am writing this letter to share the news with you that I have switched my job and I no longer work at Cipla Private Limited instead I have joined Marks Limited. I am very delighted to tell you this I have got my dream designation in this company. Although, the previous company I worked in was a great firm and I have learned a lot while working there as an assistant manager but they were taking too long to give me a promotion that I deserved. Marks limited has appointed me as an assistant director which is a great career leap for me. Every day when I wake up I am excited to go to my workplace. I also have something else to tell you that the house that I was so keen to buy is not a dream anymore and that I have paid downpayment for the same and I soon will be shifting into it. The locality of the house is very posh, peaceful, urban which I have always desired. I hope you are doing well and I will be looking forward to your letter. Take care, Anjali
Dear Sam,

I am writing this letter to share the news with you that I have switched my job and I no longer work at
Possible spelling mistake found.
Cipla
Private Limited
instead
I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
Marks Limited. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
delighted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you this I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
my dream designation in this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Although, the previous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
I worked in was a great firm and I have learned a lot while working there as an assistant manager
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they were taking too long to give me a promotion that I deserved. Marks limited has appointed me as an assistant director which is a great career leap for me. Every day when I wake up I
am excited
to go to my workplace.

I
also
have something else to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
that I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
keen to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
is not a dream anymore and that I have paid
Did you mean "down payment"?
downpayment
for the same and I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
will be shifting into it. The locality of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
posh, peaceful, urban which I have always desired.

I hope you are doing well and I will be looking forward to your letter.

Take care,

Anjali
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently switched your jobExplain to a friend•Why you changed job•Describe your new job•Tell him your other news v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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