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Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, •give details of your study plans•explain why you want to get a part-time job•suggest how your friend could help you find a job v.8

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, •give details of your study plans•explain why you want to get a part-time job•suggest how your friend could help you find a job v. 8
Dear Kevin, I hope you are good and this letter find you well. I am so sorry not write to you for a long time. I am writing this letter to inform you that I am going study in London Economy College next term for postgraduate degree. It will be continuing for 2 years and probably will finish on June 2020, at least I hope so. However, since I got a loan a bank to cover fees of program, I found myself in difficult financial situation. On the other hand, my family can not afford my school fees during the education. Therefore I' ve decided to work for cost of living as a part-time worker which help me there. As you are working in a De-Rossi Italian Fast Food Café as a waiter, I just wondered that is there any such restaurant such yours that need to a experienced personal? It does not matter what kind of job it is because I really need a job. I look forward to hearing from positive response in the near future. All the Best. Your Best Friend Jack.
Dear Kevin,

I hope you are
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good
and this letter find you well. I am
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so
sorry not write to you for a long time.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing this letter to inform you that I am going study in London Economy College
next
term for postgraduate degree.

It will be continuing for 2 years and
probably
will finish on June 2020, at least I hope
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
.

However
, since I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a loan a bank to cover fees of program, I found myself in difficult financial situation.
On the other hand
, my family can not afford my school fees during the education.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
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I&
#039; ve decided to work for cost of living as a part-time worker which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me there.

As you are working in a
Possible spelling mistake found.
De-Rossi
Italian
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Fast
Food Café as a waiter, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
wondered
that is
there any such restaurant such yours that need to
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
experienced personal?

It does not matter what kind of job it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I
really
need a job.

I look forward to hearing from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response in the near future.

All the Best.

Your Best Friend Jack.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, •give details of your study plans•explain why you want to get a part-time job•suggest how your friend could help you find a job v. 8

Letter
  American English
10 paragraphs
185 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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