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10. A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it? -Why do you need it back? -What should he/she do about it? v.2

10. A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it? -Why do you need it back? -What should he/she do about it? v. 2
Dear Rita, I hope this letter finds you in the best of your health. It has been a long time since we have met, due to our sedentary lifestyle. Remember last month when you visited to my place you borrowed American Tourist' s red suitcase as you were unable to pack all your clothes and gifts in one bag and you needed extra luggage. You will be delighted to know that I am going to Paris on work visa for three years on 23rd September and because I am carrying some important and confidential documents with me, I will be requiring that suitcase. Undoubtedly, the suitcase has many advantages and safety features. Firstly, it has a bar code lock and many hidden pockets which will help me to safely keep all the papers. Secondly, it is made of waterproof leather which will protect the documents. My sister Julie is visiting your town on 19th September and will be back by 21st September. Kindly hand over the suitcase to her on airport by 5pm. As she is boarding Air India Flight at 8 pm and her contact details are 9844556633. Hope to see you soon. Yours Lovingly, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Rita,

I hope this letter finds you in the best of your health. It has been a long time since we have met, due to our sedentary lifestyle. Remember last month when you visited to my place you borrowed American
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as you were unable to pack all your clothes and gifts in one bag and you needed extra luggage.

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to know that I am going to Paris on work visa for three years on 23rd September and
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because
I am carrying
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some
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important
and confidential documents with me, I will be requiring that
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suitcase
.
Undoubtedly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
has
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many
advantages and safety features.
Firstly
, it has a bar code lock and
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many
hidden pockets which will
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help
me to
safely
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keep
all the papers.
Secondly
, it
is made
of waterproof leather which will protect the documents.

My sister Julie is visiting your town on 19th September and will be back by 21st September. Kindly hand over the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
to her on airport by 5pm. As she is boarding Air India Flight at 8 pm and her contact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
are 9844556633.

Hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Lovingly
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
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IELTS letter 10. A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it? -Why do you need it back? -What should he/she do about it? v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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