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You agreed to take a particular job over the summer, but due to unforeseen circumstances, you can no longer take the position. Write a letter including: – Explaining your situation– An apology– Express that you would be interested in the position nex v.2

You agreed to take a particular job over the summer, but due to unforeseen circumstances, you can no longer take the position. Write a letter including: – Explaining your situation– An apology– Express that you would be interested in the position nex v. 2
I am writing this letter to apologize with regards to the contract of a job, I have agreed upon, for over the summer period, at your orchestra, -Opera music and arts centre located in Sharjah, because of unplanned reason. To begin with, unfortunately, I will not be able to keep this agreement. I have maternal health issues. As I conceived a week ago. Consequently, I am suffering from extreme nausea, heartburn, and feeling low. Thus, making it difficult for me to fulfill the job responsibility. I would first like, to sincerely apologize, not only for inconveniencing you, but also failing to pursue this golden opportunity. As I desperately wanted to get experience from your music ensemble. if you can accept my apology and if there is still an available position sometime in the near future, I would very much like to take on a position. Even if it is unpaid. I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest. yours faithfully
I am writing this letter to apologize
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
the contract of a job, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
upon, for over the summer period, at your orchestra, -Opera music and arts
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centre
located in
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Sharjah
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of unplanned reason.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, unfortunately, I will not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
this agreement. I have maternal health issues.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I conceived a week ago.
Consequently
, I am suffering from extreme nausea, heartburn, and feeling low.
Thus
, making it difficult for me to fulfill the job responsibility.

I would
first
like, to
sincerely
apologize, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for inconveniencing you,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
failing to pursue this golden opportunity.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I
desperately
wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
experience from your music ensemble.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
if
you can accept my apology and if there is
still
an available position sometime in the near future, I would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much like to take on a position.
“Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Even if
it is unpaid.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
yours
faithfully
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You agreed to take a particular job over the summer, but due to unforeseen circumstances, you can no longer take the position. Write a letter including: – Explaining your situation– An apology– Express that you would be interested in the position nex v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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