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The environment is one of the most important issues in the world today, but governments are not doing enough about it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

The environment is one of the most important issues in the world today, but governments are not doing enough about it. v. 2
First and foremost, it is often claimed that every of the living creature needs clean and peaceful environment to exist. For example, destruction of nature such as deforestation, cattle farming or burning coal and gas have extremely bad impact on our environment. So many new diseases have occurred since the time of the industrial revolution. Plenty of species disappeared from our planet for good. Moreover, people are creating enormous amount of trash every year and the number of living folks on the world is not decreasing but extremely growing up. Besides I think governments of the countries are more focus on their own local problems and they forget that we are all responsible for our planet. By destroying our natural environment, we will not be able to exist on the planet any longer. Luckily, there are some practical solutions that can be applied to reduce the problem of global warming and reduce transmission of harmful gases like carbon dioxide causing a green house effects. For instance, planting of trees, use of non-conventional fuel and solar energy, which can significantly help to reduce global temperature. Planting trees will improve the level of oxygen and will cause decrease in harmful gases as trees intake carbon dioxide as a major component of their food. Besides, I believe than governments must encourage people to think of our planet and be more responsibility the environment. From the arguments I have presented above it can be seen that both arguments definitively have their supporters and opponents. It is my view though that only when governments all countries with their people start working together, we can save our planet and have positive impact on our environment.
First
and foremost, it is
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claimed that every of the living creature needs clean and peaceful
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environment
to exist.
For example
, destruction of nature such as deforestation, cattle farming or burning coal and gas have
extremely
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bad
impact on our
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environment
.
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So
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many
new diseases have occurred since the time of the industrial revolution.
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Plenty
of species disappeared from our
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planet
for
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good
.
Moreover
,
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people
are creating enormous amount of trash every year and the number of living folks on the world is not decreasing
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but
extremely
growing up.

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Besides
I
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think
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governments
of the countries are more focus on their
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own
local
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problems and
they forget that we are all responsible for our
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planet
. By destroying our natural
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environment
, we will not be able to exist on the
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planet
any longer.

Luckily, there are
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some
practical solutions that can
be applied
to
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reduce
the problem of global warming and
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reduce
transmission of harmful gases like carbon dioxide causing a green
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house
effects.
For instance
, planting of trees,
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use
of non-conventional fuel and solar energy, which can
significantly
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help
to
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reduce
global temperature. Planting trees will
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improve
the level of oxygen and will cause decrease in harmful gases as trees intake carbon dioxide as a major component of their food.
Besides
, I believe than
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governments
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must
encourage
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people
to
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think
of our
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planet
and be more responsibility the environment.

From the arguments I have presented above it can be
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seen
that both arguments
definitively
have their supporters and opponents. It is my view though that
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only
when
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governments
all countries with their
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people
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start
working together, we can save our
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planet
and have
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positive
impact on our
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environment
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter The environment is one of the most important issues in the world today, but governments are not doing enough about it. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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