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Writing task 1 (a letter)You work for an international company. Recently your job has changed and you believe that more training is needed. Write a letter to your manager and say- How has your job changed? - Describe a type of training you will need. - Sugg v.1

Writing task 1 (a letter)You work for an international company. Recently your job has changed and you believe that more training is needed. Write a letter to your manager and say- How has your job changed? - Describe a type of training you will need. - Sugg v. 1
Dear Mr. Smirnov, I am writing with regard to my new role as GIS-analyst and my expanded duties as well. As you know, I have been working in our company since 2015 and all this period I worked as part of our GIS team and my main duty was maintaining GIS-data base and coordinating field works. However, today I am in charge of the whole crew and every project of the cartographic department. Frankly speaking, I do not have enough managing skills, especially of the financial part of a project. Therefore, I would like to attend three months course for GIS project management. The course is conducted in Australian Institute of Remote Sensing and complete cost of it is 2000 AU. It is a compatible price and include full time training as well as it is one of the best courses among similar ones. On top of project cost management, the course will cover project risk management. As it is a full time course, I would like to ask you for educational leave from 1st of May till 31st of July. I have made all of the arrangements; my deputy will be able to manage all open projects. I am going to be in touch with him and if any unforeseen circumstances appears, I will handle it. Thank you in advance for your kind cooperation. Best regards, Maria
Dear Mr.
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Smirnov
,

I am writing with regard to my new role as GIS-analyst and my expanded duties
as well
.

As you know, I have been working in our
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company
since 2015 and all this period I worked as part of our GIS team and my main duty was maintaining GIS-data base and coordinating field works.
However
,
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today
I am in charge of the whole crew and every
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project
of the cartographic department.

Frankly
speaking, I do not have
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enough
managing
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skills
,
especially
of the financial part of a
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project
.
Therefore
, I would like to attend three months
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course
for GIS
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
management. The
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course
is conducted
in Australian Institute of Remote Sensing and complete cost of it is 2000 AU. It is a compatible price and include full time training
as well
as it is one of the best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
among similar ones. On top of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
cost management, the
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course
will cover
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project
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
management.

As it is a full time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I would like to ask you for educational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
from 1st of May till 31st of July. I have made
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all of the
arrangements; my deputy will be able to manage all open
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
. I am going to be in touch with him and if any unforeseen circumstances appears, I will handle it.

Thank you in advance for your kind cooperation.

Best regards,

Maria
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Writing task 1 (a letter)You work for an international company. Recently your job has changed and you believe that more training is needed. Write a letter to your manager and say- How has your job changed? - Describe a type of training you will need. - Sugg v. 1

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  American English
8 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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