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You are a student at a university in the UK. You have recently lost your university ID card. Write to the local police station, giving details of who you are, what happened and ask to record your details so that you can apply for a new ID card. v.4

You are a student at a university in the UK. You have recently lost your university ID card. Write to the local police station, giving details of who you are, what happened and ask to record your details so that you can apply for a new ID card. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Sherin Emma, a second-year student at the University of Liverpool and my major is Economics. I am writing to report a lost identification card that I was provided by my university. I respectfully state that on 21st December, I went to the local stadium to enjoy a music concert and had been there from 4. 00 pm to 7: 00 pm. After I returned to my room, at around 7: 44 in the evening, I could not find my University ID. I am positive that I had it with me when I entered the stadium. I must have missed it during the concert. I immediately notified the occurrence to the university dean and he suggested me to report it to the police station and have a copy of the report to apply for a new ID card. I waited two days hoping that someone might find it and return it to the university but unfortunately it did not happen. Now I would like you to officially record the incidence of my lost ID card so that I can collect a copy and apply for a new one. The ID has my name - Sherin Emma and number LUA-45874E, inscribed on it and is valid until 30th November 2020. I would be much obliged if you kindly register my lost ID case and provide me with a copy of that to help me get a new one. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
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Sherin
Emma, a second-year student at the
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University
of Liverpool and my major is Economics. I am writing to report a lost identification card that I
was provided
by my university.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
respectfully
state that on 21st December, I went to the local stadium to enjoy a music concert and had been there from 4. 00 pm to 7: 00 pm. After I returned to my room, at around 7: 44 in the evening, I could not find my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
ID. I am
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positive
that I had it with me when I entered the stadium. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have missed it during the concert.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
immediately notified the occurrence to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
dean and
he suggested me to report it to the police station and have a copy of the report to apply for a new ID card.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
waited two days hoping that someone might find it and return it to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
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but
unfortunately it did not happen.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
I would like you to
officially
record the incidence of my lost ID card
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can collect a copy and apply for a new one. The ID has my name
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
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Sherin
Emma and number LUA-45874E, inscribed on it and is valid until 30th November 2020.

I would be much obliged if you kindly register my lost ID case and provide me with a copy of that to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a new one.

Yours
faithfully
,
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You are a student at a university in the UK. You have recently lost your university ID card. Write to the local police station, giving details of who you are, what happened and ask to record your details so that you can apply for a new ID card. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
244 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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