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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for the community, should always be taken into account when deciding the punishmen v.19

Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for the community, should always be taken into account when deciding the punishmen v. 19
Are both the mugging and murder the same? If I do a small crime unintentionally and commit ten accountable felonies, will I get the same punishment for both? The jurisdiction department of the country has one of the most essential duty to perform and its decisions are considered as the final ones. Therefore, with such a responsibility, it cannot make the ad-hoc or fixed decision for everyone. This essay discusses why the circumstances and the reason for the commitment of a crime must be taken into account while declaring a decision. Also, provide the reason for the fixed punishment failure. The fixed sentence for each felon is equivalent to all the crimes are equal whatever it is either a traffic rule break or a murder. For example, a small street thief will also be equal to a rapist and he/she will get a sentence to death. This can be an obvious bias with a person who committed a minor crime by mistake or unintentionally. Moreover, it might motivate people to commit terrific crimes. In such a system, a person who breaks the traffic law would be inspired to kill his enemy because, in the end, he will get the same decision. Therefore, fixed punishment would never work in terms of crime for any country. On the other hand, the circumstances in which a crime happened and the inspiration behind the fact of crime must be given a priority while making a decision. For instance, an unintentional or accidental crime should have lower seriousness rather than a planned one. Likewise, the situation of a person whether he/she was motivated by the enemy or not should also be accounted for. To add more, sometimes people become a passive member in the crime such as give money to a professional killer to do their task. In such cases, both are equal and must be given the same sentence irrespective of their dignity in the community. In conclusion, I think that instead of being equal for all the felons and declare the same result for everyone, a thorough analysis of the status of affairs of individuals, motivation which made such situation and the membership of each and every person connected with it must be done prior to declaring any result. At last, it’s the decision about someone’s life.
Are both the mugging and murder the same? If I do a
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small
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crime
unintentionally
and commit ten accountable felonies, will I
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get
the same punishment for both? The jurisdiction department of the country has one of the most essential
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duty
to perform and its
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decisions
are considered
as the final ones.
Therefore
, with such a responsibility, it cannot
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make
the
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ad-hoc
or
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fixed
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decision
for everyone. This essay discusses why the circumstances and the reason for the commitment of a
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crime
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must
be taken
into account while declaring a
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decision
.
Also
, provide the reason for the
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fixed
punishment failure.

The
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fixed
sentence for each felon is equivalent to all the
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crimes
are
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equal
whatever it is either a traffic
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rule
break or a murder.
For example
, a
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small
street thief will
also
be
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equal
to a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
rapist and
he/she will
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get
a sentence to death. This can be an obvious bias with a
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person
who committed a minor
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crime
by mistake or
unintentionally
.
Moreover
, it might motivate
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people
to commit terrific
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crimes
. In such a system, a
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person
who breaks the traffic law would
be inspired
to kill his enemy
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because
, in the
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end
, he will
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get
the same
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decision
.
Therefore
,
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fixed
punishment would never work in terms of
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crime
for any country.

On the other hand
, the circumstances in which a
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crime
happened and the inspiration behind the fact of
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crime
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must
be
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given
a priority while making a
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decision
.
For instance
, an unintentional or accidental
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crime
should have lower seriousness
rather
than a planned one.
Likewise
, the situation of a
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person
whether he/she
was motivated
by the enemy or not should
also
be accounted
for. To
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add
more,
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sometimes
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people
become a passive member in the
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crime
such as give money to a professional killer to do their task. In such cases, both are
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equal
and
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must
be
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given
the same sentence irrespective of their dignity in the community.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that
instead
of being
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equal
for all the felons and declare the same result for everyone, a thorough analysis of the status of affairs of individuals, motivation which made such situation and the membership of each and every
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person
connected with it
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must
be done
prior to declaring any result. At last, it’s the
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decision
about someone’s life.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for the community, should always be taken into account when deciding the punishmen v. 19

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  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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