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You have borrowed something from your friend, but it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend and say- Apologize for damaging the product- How was it damaged? - What will you do about it? v.2

You have borrowed something from your friend, but it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend and say- Apologize for damaging the product- How was it damaged? - What will you do about it? v. 2
Dear Rachel, Hope you are doing well. I' m writing to apologize for spoiling your pen drive. I know you' ve been asking me since last weak to return your pen drive. Unfortunately, I am afraid to say that it got damaged before two days by my silly mistake. As you' re aware that i had an assignment submission as well as I was preparing for our annual function in the college. It was all mess and unknowingly I had left your pen drive in the campus. The next day when i was searching for it, I found it on the playground. It was completely crashed and broken. I am extremely sorry to create hassle for you. Don' t you worry, I have ordered similar pen drive of San disk with 16 GB memory. Also, I' ve decided to help you fix all the lost data from the broken pen drive. Hope you' ll forgive me and accept my apologies. Looking forward to see you soon. Best regards, Jessica Ayri
Dear Rachel,

Hope you are doing well.
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I&
#039; m writing to apologize for spoiling your
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pen
drive.

I know
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you&
#039; ve been asking me since last weak to return your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
drive. Unfortunately, I am afraid to say that it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
damaged
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before
two days by my silly mistake.

As
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you&
#039; re aware that
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
had an assignment submission
as well
as I was preparing for our annual function in the college. It was all mess and
unknowingly
I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
drive in the campus. The
next
day when
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was searching for it, I found it on the playground. It was completely crashed and broken.

I am
extremely
sorry to create hassle for you.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Don&
#039; t you worry, I have ordered similar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
drive of San disk with 16 GB memory.
Also
,
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I&
#039; ve decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
all the lost data from the broken
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
drive.

Hope
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you&
#039; ll forgive me and accept my apologies. Looking forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Best regards,

Jessica
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Ayri
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter You have borrowed something from your friend, but it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend and say- Apologize for damaging the product- How was it damaged? - What will you do about it? v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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