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11/10/2017You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want to go? v.1

11/10/2017You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want to go? v. 1
Dear John, As you know, I have been going through a difficult divorce with my spouse for almost a year and it has had an adverse influence on my mood and even overall physical well-being. So, traveling abroad appears to be a right thing to do to switch my attention from problems to positive prospects. In addition, I have an idea to start a new business with a Chinese firm and visiting the state provides me with an indispensable opportunity to meet face-to-face with my partners. I would like you join me because of your knowledge of Chinese language. Although it is possible to find a good translator in China, I cannot trust blindly to a person whom I don’t know well. Moreover, you have not had a holiday for almost five years by now and having some rest and fun overseas will surely have an advantageous impact on you. I promise the majority of our time would be devoted to a variety of local entertainment. I plan to arrive at Beijing airport on 2nd March 2017. It will be a Friday evening; so, there will be a plethora of time to acclimatize and adapt to a novel time zone as well as overcome a jet lag. I intend to spend four days in the megalopolis and three days on visiting such places as the Great Wall of China that are situated outside the city. I will not go into details because I assume you are well-aware of the local landmarks and attractions. Hope you’ll accept my invitation. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear John,

As you know, I have been going through a difficult divorce with my spouse for almost a year and it has had an adverse influence on my mood and even
overall
physical well-being.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, traveling abroad appears to be a right thing to do to switch my attention from problems to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
prospects.
In addition
, I have an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a new business with a Chinese firm and visiting the state provides me with an indispensable opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
face-to-face with my partners.

I would like you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of your knowledge of Chinese language. Although it is possible to find a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
translator in China, I cannot trust
blindly
to a person whom I don’t know well.
Moreover
, you have not had a holiday for almost five years by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
rest and fun overseas will
surely
have an advantageous impact on you. I promise the majority of our time would
be devoted
to a variety of local entertainment.

I plan to arrive at Beijing airport on 2nd March 2017. It will be a Friday evening;
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, there will be a plethora of time to acclimatize and adapt to a novel time zone
as well
as overcome a jet lag. I intend to spend four days in the megalopolis and three days on visiting such places as the Great Wall of China that
are situated
outside the city. I will not go into
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I assume you are well-aware of the local landmarks and attractions.

Hope you’ll accept my invitation.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
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Dubinchuk
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5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter 11/10/2017You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want to go? v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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