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The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v.6

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v. 6
The given charts illustrate the percentage of female, who graduated from three groups of school: (under the intermediate school, intermediate school, over the intermediate school, respectively 1, 2 and 3) in someland between 1945 and 1995. Overall, it is clear that the two most changes in standard in education of lady were group 1 and group 3 over 5 decades. In 1945, the proportion of women graduating under grade 6 accounted for the most at 85% meanwhile the figure for the high level of education ( above year 9) was only 5 % and 10% of total girl graduated secondary school. Over a half-century witnessed an incredible development of education, there was not any female, who dropped out of group 1 school. In contrast, the form 2 school climbed sharply to the most at 90%, eighteen times as itself in the earlier 50 years. The rates of 2 group school were still relatively similar in 1945 at 10%.
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: (under the intermediate
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, intermediate
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, over the intermediate
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someland
between 1945 and 1995.

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in standard in education of lady were
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1 and
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3 over 5 decades.

In 1945, the proportion of women graduating under grade 6 accounted for the most at 85% meanwhile the figure for the high level of education
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(
above year 9) was
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5 % and 10% of total girl
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graduated
secondary school.

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1
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.
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, the form 2
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climbed
sharply
to the most at 90%, eighteen times as itself in the earlier 50 years. The rates of 2
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were
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IELTS letter The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. v. 6

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