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A colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you're not able to attend. Write a letWhy you cannot make it yo the party, something good he did for you that you appreciate while working together and state how are you going to get in touc v.3

A colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you're not able to attend. Write a letWhy you cannot make it yo the party, something good he did for you that you appreciate while working together and state how are you going to get in touc v. 3
Dear Harry, Hi. How are you doing right now? I am doing fine here at Manila. I am Writing to you because I cannot attend to your party this coming Friday. Our company will be having a meeting in Singapore since I am a Marketing Head I cannot be absent on that day. I have tried to ask permission with our Vice President but she said that I need to be present in that meeting. I still remember the time that you have saved me in that board meeting. Back in the days I do not know how to create a presentation but you on the other hand helped me created that presentment. I am thankful up until this day that you taught me a lot of things and skills that I can use in my present job. You can always stay my apartment. Do not hesitate to give me a call if you are in trouble this is my number 1234567 and also you can send me an email at bil@mail. com. Take care harry and write back soon. Best wishes, Bill
Dear Harry,

Hi. How are you doing right
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now
? I am doing fine here at Manila. I am Writing to you
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because
I cannot attend to your party this coming Friday.

Our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
will be having a meeting in Singapore since I am a Marketing Head I cannot be absent on that day. I have tried to ask permission with our Vice President
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
she said that I need to be present in that meeting.

I
still
remember the time that you have saved me in that board meeting. Back in the days I do not know how to create a presentation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
you
on the other hand
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me created that presentment. I am thankful up until this day that you taught me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
things and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
in my present job.

You can always stay my apartment. Do not hesitate to give me a call if you are in trouble this is my number 1234567 and
also
you can
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send me an email
at
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bil@mail
.
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com
.

Take care harry and write back
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soon
.

Best wishes,

Bill
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter A colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you're not able to attend. Write a letWhy you cannot make it yo the party, something good he did for you that you appreciate while working together and state how are you going to get in touc v. 3

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182 words
6.0
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