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Recently, your position in the company has changed, and accordingly, you are required to write a letter to ask for some corresponding training programs that contains the following information: • What was your last position? • What qualities does your ne v.2

Recently, your position in the company has changed, and accordingly, you are required to write a letter to ask for some corresponding training programs that contains the following information: • What was your last position? • What qualities does your ne v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that the latest news concerning my new position and want to obtain some information related to the my training schedule. I have been working in the company for seven years as a financial adviser but the with opening of new branch in Berlin, Germany, I have got a promotion and I was appointed by board of management as Operation Manager to this country. However, according to my head manager, before I start the new mission I should attend some educational programs that are time management, making correct decision, how to manage employees and so on. I would be grateful if you could send me list of programs that I can join at the trainer center and provide me a little more knowledge date of programs? In fact, I have had many experienced detrimental situation in the previous job about conflict between employees and employer. Therefore I really keen on participating these kind of practices. I look forward to hearing a positive response from you in the near future. Yours Faithfully.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that the latest
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news
concerning my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
position and want to obtain
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some
information related to
A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "my training" or "the training"?
the my training
schedule.

I have been working in the
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company
for seven years as a financial adviser
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but
the with opening of
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new
branch in Berlin, Germany, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
promotion and
I
was appointed
by board of management as Operation Manager to this country.

However
, according to my head manager,
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before
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
mission I should attend
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some
educational programs that are time management, making correct decision, how to manage employees and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on. I would be grateful if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me list of programs that I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
at the trainer center and provide me a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
more knowledge date of programs?

In fact, I have had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
experienced detrimental situation in the previous job about conflict between employees and employer.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
I
really
keen on participating
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of practices.

I look forward to hearing a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from you in the near future.

Yours
Faithfully
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Recently, your position in the company has changed, and accordingly, you are required to write a letter to ask for some corresponding training programs that contains the following information: • What was your last position? • What qualities does your ne v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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