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Write a letter to your friend who recently moved to another country. In your letter you should say why you are writing. You should discuss when you want to see your friend. You should discuss how you plan to meet your friend again. v.2

Write a letter to your friend who recently moved to another country. In your letter you should say why you are writing. You should discuss when you want to see your friend. You should discuss how you plan to meet your friend again. v. 2
Hi John, I hope that you are doing very well in the new home. I just wanted to let you know that you really being missed, and I decided to visit you soon. I am planning to fly to Toronto in the next month, on May 1st, 2019, for business purposes. So, I really would like to see there. My visit will be just for 10 days, thus I am wondering if you have an available time between the 2rd of May till the 10th of May to meet up. I prefer to meet in the evening any day. Since, I have a plethora of meetings and conferences to attends at the morning. As far as I know, Toronto has several entertainment activities to do such like visit Niagara waterfalls, Downtown Square, and nightclubs. Therefore, I wish to do any of them during my stay there. It certainly will be a memorable visit. I look forward to seeing you soon, Thanks a lot, Bilal
Hi John,

I hope that you are doing
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very
well in the new home. I
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just
wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that you
really
being missed
, and I decided to visit you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am planning to
fly
to Toronto in the
next
month, on May 1st, 2019, for business purposes.
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So
, I
really
would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
there.

My visit will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
for 10 days,
thus
I am wondering if you have an available time between the
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
2rd
of May till the 10th of May to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
up. I prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
in the evening any day. Since, I have a plethora of meetings and conferences to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "attend".
attends
The usual collocation for "morning" is "in". Revise: "in the morning".
at the morning
.

As far as I know, Toronto has several entertainment activities to do such like visit Niagara waterfalls, Downtown Square, and nightclubs.
Therefore
, I wish to do any of them during my stay there. It
certainly
will be a memorable visit.

I look forward to seeing you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
,

Thanks a lot,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Bilal
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend who recently moved to another country. In your letter you should say why you are writing. You should discuss when you want to see your friend. You should discuss how you plan to meet your friend again. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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