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You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and say– Apologize for not being able to meet. – Give your reasons. – Suggest ho v.2

You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and say– Apologize for not being able to meet. – Give your reasons. – Suggest ho v. 2
Hi Jakie, I’m sorry that I couldn’t see you in my trip to Shiraz last week. I was going to come to the Atlas restaurant where we supposed meet each other that I received a call from my mother. She told me that my father had a hear attack and is in hospital. So I had to return back immediately to help my parents. Fortunately my father is feeling better now and they will let him go home tomorrow and I’ll come back to Shiraz to continue my trip there. Nevertheless, due to this interruption in my trip I can’t see you this time, but I’ll be back to Shiraz in the mid of next month and we can meet then. I hope you’re also available that time and we can spend even more time together as I have less work related tasks to do. Please let me know if you are free and we can see each other then. See you, Sorena.
Hi
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Jakie
,

I’m sorry that I couldn’t
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see
you in my trip to Shiraz
‘last week’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last week
. I was going to
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come
to the Atlas restaurant where we supposed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
each other that I received a call from my mother. She
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me that my father had a
Did you mean "heart" (=muscular organ)?
hear
attack and is in hospital.
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So
I had to
Consider using "return".
return back
immediately to
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help
my parents.

Fortunately
my father is feeling better
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now and
they will
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let
him go home tomorrow and I’ll
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come
back to Shiraz to continue my trip there.
Nevertheless
, due to this interruption in my trip I can’t
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see
you this time,
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but
I’ll be back to Shiraz in the mid of
next
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month and
we can
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meet
then.

I hope you’re
also
available that
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
time and
we can spend even more time together as I have less work related tasks to do.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
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let
me know if you are
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free and
we can
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see
each
Did you mean "other than"?
other then
.

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See
you,

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Sorena
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and say– Apologize for not being able to meet. – Give your reasons. – Suggest ho v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
163 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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