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you forget your bag in the gym and gym management announced that the gym will be closed for a week for some renovation work You need your bag as it has important things in it Write a letter to the manager of the gym In your letter introduce yourself and d v.2

you forget your bag in the gym and gym management announced that the gym will be closed for a week for some renovation work You need your bag as it has important things in it Write a letter to the manager of the gym In your letter introduce yourself and d v. 2
Dear Mr Ajay, My name is Arshdeep singh, I have been the permanent member of your gym since 2014 and my membership card number is 564. Recently, I got the news to hear that the gym will be closed for seven days in order to renovate. Therefore, I am writing this letter to inform you about my bag which I had forgotten in your gym locker that was allocated to me use regularly. Firstly, I would like to tell you that the color of my bag is black and it has three big zippers. If I talk about the things, it has power bank as well as my laptop include my driving licence and debit card. I have to collect all these things before going outside in an every morning. I am hoping from you that you will find a way to hand over me all these precious things in the next coming two days. I am looking forward to hearing you soon. Yours sincerely, Arshdeep singh
Dear Mr Ajay,

My name is
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Arshdeep
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singh
, I have been the permanent member of your gym since 2014 and my membership card number is 564. Recently, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
the news to hear that the gym will
be closed
for seven days in order to renovate.
Therefore
, I am writing this letter to inform you about my bag which I had forgotten in your gym locker that
was allocated
to me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
regularly
.

Firstly
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that the color of my bag is black and it has three
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
zippers. If I talk about the things, it has power bank
as well
as my laptop include my driving
Possible spelling mistake. 'licence' is British English.
licence
and debit card. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
collect all these things
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
going outside in an every morning.

I am hoping from you that you will find a way to hand over me all these precious things in the
next
coming two days.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking forward to hearing you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Arshdeep
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singh
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter you forget your bag in the gym and gym management announced that the gym will be closed for a week for some renovation work You need your bag as it has important things in it Write a letter to the manager of the gym In your letter introduce yourself and d v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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