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Your local newspaper want to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a Letter to the newspaper. In your letter. Suggest someone who deserves the reward. . Mention what they have done to help the community. . Say what reward you wan v.2

Your local newspaper want to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a Letter to the newspaper. In your letter. Suggest someone who deserves the reward. . Mention what they have done to help the community. . Say what reward you wan v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in regards to the article published on 2th march in local newspaper about people who have done extra ordinary services for their community and they should be rewarded for that. My brother friend name amit who started a shelter for old age people whose children don' t want keep their old parents with them, also those who left their parents back and settle in abroad. He takes care of them like their own parents. He left his job so that he can devote much more time for their welfare. I want you to mention one article on him and his shelter home for od people in your newspaper, so that more and more people will come to know about his contribution towards the society and this way may be he will get more funding so that he can provide more place to other old age people. I hope you will consider my request and publish an article about this. Your Sincerely, Jasmine
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
the article published on
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
2th
march in local newspaper about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who have done
This word is normally spelled as one.
extra ordinary
services for their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
community and
they should
be rewarded
for that.

My brother friend name
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amit
who
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started
a shelter for
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old
age
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people
whose children
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don&
#039; t want
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keep
their
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old
parents with them,
also
those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
their parents back and settle in abroad. He takes care of them like their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
parents. He
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
his job
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that he can devote much more time for their welfare.

I want you to mention one article on him and his shelter home for
Possible spelling mistake found.
od
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people
in your newspaper,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to know about his contribution towards the society and this way
Did you mean "maybe" (= perhaps)?
may be
he will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more funding
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that he can provide more place to other
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
age
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

I hope you will consider my request and publish an article about this.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
Sincerely
,

Jasmine
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Your local newspaper want to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a Letter to the newspaper. In your letter. Suggest someone who deserves the reward. . Mention what they have done to help the community. . Say what reward you wan v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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