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Write a letter to the Mayor, the head of a municipal government, complaining about a situation in which some adolescents let their dogs run wildly causing a dangerous situation. v.4

Write a letter to the Mayor, the head of a municipal government, complaining about a situation in which some adolescents let their dogs run wildly causing a dangerous situation. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in order to bring your attention to an important issue which our neighbourhood is currently facing. For quite some time, we have been noticing with great concern that some young boys of about 12 to 15 years of age from our area are allowing their dogs to run wildly in our neighbourhood. Initially, it was not a matter of big concern, but slowly and slowly, this is becoming dangerous as the dogs are frequently coming into contacts with the community members, which is not safe. In fact, the situation has become so dangerous and scary for some of our good neighbours that they are even afraid to come out of their homes sometimes because of these freely-roaming dogs. Some of the members of our community have already talked to the parents of these boys, but, unfortunately, the situation hasn’t exactly changed much in our favour. In view of this dangerous situation, which is prevailing in our neighbourhood, I would like you to please take some necessary steps to bring these adolescent boys and their dogs under control before some serious accidents take place. Yours faithfully, Jon Garson
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in order to bring your attention to an
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important
issue which our
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neighbourhood
is
currently
facing.

For quite
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some
time, we have been noticing with great concern that
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some
young boys of about 12 to 15 years of age from our area are allowing their
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dogs
to run
wildly
in our
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neighbourhood
.
Initially
, it was not a matter of
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big
concern,
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but
slowly
and
slowly
, this is becoming
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dangerous
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dogs
are
frequently
coming into contacts with the community members, which is not safe.

In fact, the situation has become
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so
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dangerous
and scary for
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some
of our
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good
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neighbours
that they are even afraid to
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come
out of their homes
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sometimes
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because
of these
freely
-roaming
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dogs
.
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
Some of the
members of our community have already talked to the parents of these boys,
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but
, unfortunately, the situation hasn’t exactly
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changed
much in our
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favour
.

In view of this
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dangerous
situation, which is prevailing in our
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neighbourhood
, I would like you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
take
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some
necessary steps to bring these adolescent boys and their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dogs
under control
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before
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some
serious accidents take place.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jon
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Garson
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to the Mayor, the head of a municipal government, complaining about a situation in which some adolescents let their dogs run wildly causing a dangerous situation. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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